Title: First Transformation
| 23 Nov 2009 3:24 am
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Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed)
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Cool beginning! Hermione is really clever but I bet something goes wrong. :) Nice job with Severus' thoughts, very in character and entertaining too.
Oooo! The suspence, it's killing me! lol, Nice one!
Oooh, very interesting. I like what you've got so far. One suggestion would be to write out the word "okay" instead of abbreviating it as "o.k." Good story!
-P.G.
Hmmmm..........This is certainly interesting. I look forward to reading more
Title: First Transformation
| 20 Nov 2008 8:44 am
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Reviewer: ReginaCaeli (Anonymous)
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Great begining,I can hardly wait to see where you take it.
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