Loved this line,"Severus' long legs were the only thing he thanked his father for."
Good chapter. I think some commas were missing in the speaking. You may want to think about going back after the story is finished and re-editing. The whole story idea is really good and I can't wait to read more. :)
Ha, Pomfery caught him, lol. Hopefully Sev can learn to get along with Harry.
-P.G.
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| 17 Jan 2009 1:17 am
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| Reviewer: maha q8 (Anonymous)
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i'm kindda fraid to read the rest
i want harry to be a boy in the next chapter coz i think it's agood story but i'm not sure if i want to read the rest if he is still a dog
iread the rest now and see
I like it! Thanks for the story!
I'm truly loving this story. Thanks so much for sharing it with us. I can't wait to see Snape slowly softening toward our boy.
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| 20 Nov 2008 9:23 am
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| Reviewer: toast (Signed)
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oooo this is really good i can't wait for you to develop this further
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| 20 Nov 2008 8:51 am
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| Reviewer: ReginaCaeli (Anonymous)
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Lovely chapter,the part about "the dog that lived" made me burst out laughing.
this is a bit confusing, but good nontheless. What exactly were they attempting to brew?
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| 20 Nov 2008 1:28 am
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| Reviewer: Acop (Anonymous)
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That's a really interesting beginning here, I'm looking forward to the next chapter :)
But you might want to be a bit more carefull when you shift from 1st to 3rd person because it is really confusing.
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| 19 Nov 2008 8:24 pm
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| Reviewer: AllyKat (Anonymous)
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Your point of view shift from third person to first back to third is real confusing. Some sort of break or warning or just stick with one or the other would make your story better.
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