Favorite line: "...Good, good. Not only do you do this for yourselves. You may not realize this but the two of you have influence over some special children. You should make more of an effort to be good examples. They're like sponges you know."
Loved this chapter. Harry is very cute. :) Snape is in character. Great development of your story.
Make sure that you go back and understand the difference between week and weak. Week means seven days, weak means no strength. I think you used the wrong one once in this chapter.
I loved the banter between Sirius and Snape--very amusing!
-P.G.
How cute was Harry as a puppy? I stumbled across this story and thought I would give it a try and I'm not at all disappointed.
Off to read the next chapter
| Title: Waking Up
| 28 Nov 2008 9:04 pm
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| Reviewer: ReginaCaeli (Anonymous)
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I am really enjoying this story,Great Job!!
Love the way this story is going. I would watch your points of view a little bit with the second chapter and the first. You switch from one perspective to another and it makes the flow a bit harder to follow. Other than that, I love this and I'm eager to read more. Keep going, buddy.
| Title: Waking Up
| 28 Nov 2008 3:33 am
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| Reviewer: Me (Anonymous)
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I do hope you update soon. i can't wait to see how Snape deals with a 5 year old Potter. Just hope you don't make him a total angel but also not a total demon. Update soon!
| Title: Waking Up
| 25 Nov 2008 10:58 am
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| Reviewer: caro (Anonymous)
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Just loving this fic! De-aging Harry is always cute but now there's added puppy!!
lol. Of course its already forming in Dumbledores mind. I don so much enjoy this
| Title: Waking Up
| 25 Nov 2008 3:50 am
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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You will need to change the word telescope to microscope.
good chapter keep it up The story plot is good.
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