| Title: Waking Up
| 24 Nov 2008 5:21 pm
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| Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous)
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I like it! Thanks for the story!
I'm truly loving this story. Thanks so much for sharing it with us. I can't wait to see Snape slowly softening toward our boy.
| Title: To the Infirmary
| 20 Nov 2008 9:23 am
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| Reviewer: toast (Signed)
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oooo this is really good i can't wait for you to develop this further
| Title: To the Infirmary
| 20 Nov 2008 8:51 am
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| Reviewer: ReginaCaeli (Anonymous)
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Lovely chapter,the part about "the dog that lived" made me burst out laughing.
| Title: First Transformation
| 20 Nov 2008 8:44 am
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| Reviewer: ReginaCaeli (Anonymous)
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Great begining,I can hardly wait to see where you take it.
this is a bit confusing, but good nontheless. What exactly were they attempting to brew?
| Title: To the Infirmary
| 20 Nov 2008 1:28 am
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| Reviewer: Acop (Anonymous)
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That's a really interesting beginning here, I'm looking forward to the next chapter :)
But you might want to be a bit more carefull when you shift from 1st to 3rd person because it is really confusing.
| Title: To the Infirmary
| 19 Nov 2008 8:24 pm
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| Reviewer: AllyKat (Anonymous)
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Your point of view shift from third person to first back to third is real confusing. Some sort of break or warning or just stick with one or the other would make your story better.
This is really original. I'm curious though, is Snape really Harry's father, or Snape just adopts him. I wasn't too sure from the description. Either way, I really like it and can't wait to read more! ;)
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