Oooh this sounds like fun. It's very catchy, well done
Author's Response: Thanks.
This is very nice. I really like the way that you handled Harry and Snape's conversation. It was so cute that Harry tried to get out of his punishment. Too cute! ;)
I'm looking forward to your next update! ;)
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. I sort of based Harry and Sev off my roommate and his 11 old son. I know when I was 10 I tried to get out of trouble, though it wasn't for not turning in homework, that was both my sister and my "fake little brother" (the roommates son). I wish I could promise a speedy update, but real life is going to be far to crazy for that. I have final exams coming up in only a few short weeks. Sadly that means fanfiction whether it be reading or writing will be placed on the back burner.
This is a really good start. Grammar is not too bad, punctuation needs work. If you would like some help with that, I am more than willing to help you. Just let me know.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. Yeah, when I said grammar I really meant punctuation. My English prof was on my case about my lack of knowledge of how to use a comma the entire time I had him. That was his only problem he really ever had with my writing.
| Title: Chapter 1
| 18 Nov 2008 3:26 pm
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| Reviewer: ER (Anonymous)
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This is a cute fic so far. I can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you like it. I can't promise that you won't be waiting long. I have two weeks of class and then exams so fanfiction will be on the back burner whether that be reading or writing.
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