Oh wow! So far this is really good. You did extremely well with getting my attention.
I agree with you about Marge...
I love the fat comment with Crabbe and Goyle...Lol...love your story...I think I've read the first few chapters somewhere...
| Title: School and Insecurities
| 13 Feb 2009 12:50 am
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| Reviewer: AvidReader (Anonymous)
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Wow. This story is fantastic!! I love it!
Good story. I remember, there's a story called "Bonds of Betrayal" where Harry and Draco meet at a young age. Severus wasn't Harry's guardian. McGonagall was but Severus nice to Harry and was hoping Harry would be a good influence on Draco since Draco would spend the day at Hogwarts every now and then. Like your story, "Bonds of Betrayal" dealt with Harry being rescued from an abusive situation when he was a small. In "Bonds of Betrayal", Harry continued to have relapses even when he was 13. He was friends with both Draco and Ron but Draco and Ron didn't get along with each other. If you want Harry to team up with Fred and George, it would be interesting to see how them and Draco would interact. Also, about Harry spending time at the Malfoys with kids who are from families that don't have a favorable opinion of muggles... I think Dumbledore would be concerned about that as well as the therapist. There's a chance that kind of ideology might rub off on him and given his expireance with muggles, its a disaster waiting to happen. I think if Severus wants Harry not to be predjadice again muggles and muggle borns, he needs to be exposed more to the muggle world. Anyways, keep up the good work.
Oooh... The remorse Vernon is feeling is quite interesting. Great start!
-P.G.
Kids can be cruel, it's a known fact. I'm glad Draco could get the others to stop picking on Harry (if temporarily), that kid sure can throw a tantrum though, lol!
The ending was sweet :) Harry's very close to Sev.
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