This is great, but somehow it got posted twice on the same page.
I can't wait, I'm going to read the next chapter. Poor Harry, he never gets a break, does the poor kid?
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| 22 Jan 2009 5:30 pm
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| Reviewer: Belelaith (Anonymous)
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The first chapter seems to have been repeated so that the text appears twice as long.
An excellent start. I'll be waiting to see what else you can come up with.
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| 22 Jan 2009 9:47 am
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| Reviewer: La Mariane (Anonymous)
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Hello! this is a very promising first chapter, and I like it (even if it is not very original: several fics begin with Harry alone at the train station). There is just one problem: you typed the chapter twice!
Your story repeated several paragraphs, you might want to check it. Otherwise a good start.
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