Wonderful first chapter. Poor Harry. I wonder what Snape is doing in Kings Cross?! And I don't think Hermione would've ran to tell on harry. Even tho it would bother canon Hermione, she would'd betray Harry. (knowing Harry he would feel betrayed if one of his friends told)
Good start--I like when Ron calls McDonald's McDoogals, lol. I feel bad about what Harry's in store for though and I hope Snape is there to take him away from it soon, even though being with him probably won't be that great either. One small error you might want to correct is that you call Harry a she instead of a he in the part about McGonagall. All in all, good first chapter!
-P.G.
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