so... is severus is kais dad does that make harry his brother? oh and who is his mom?
| Title: Moving Forward
| 25 Aug 2009 1:43 pm
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| Reviewer: Vicky (Anonymous)
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I love it! I adore the whole story, but haven't reviewed before because I had to read on. Fingers crossed for Shadow! I really adore him, and hope he does manage to find a way back. I think it would be interesting for Shadow to appear back in the mirror, maybe as he enters the gray mist, and for Harry to see him and shout or something, then have to look away very briefly for whatever reason -maybe Shadow can't talk and Harry closes his eyes to reach for his magic- and for Shadow to then be gone. LOL, clearly I have put a lot of thought into this. I can't stop thinking about it, about what might happen next. Anyway, that might be a breaking point at which Harry then talks to Snape, maybe the meeting could be in the bathroom before a potions class, and Snape makes him tell him what's wrong... LOL, sorry, rambling. Whatever you do is bound to be incredibly brilliant, just like the rest of the story! *sighs* Harry and Snape are both idiots! But I like what you've done, even if it is bound to hurt Harry when he thinks that Snape doesn't want him and is relived to be able to get rid of him, and that it also hurts Snape, BUT, that said, on the whole I'm sure it will all turn out excellently - well, I hope! - and they will FINALLY talk! You have a brilliant talent! You portray the emotions that Harry especially is feeling exceptionally well, and the reader really feels for him ad understands exactly what he is doing, and why. I hope we get a bit from Snape's point of view as he thinks back on exactly what Harry has said, and what he meant by it. I also hope we see Sirius soon! And that Snape is there when him and Harry meet, though that would hurt him it would be good to see what he thought of it. And I hope when we do see Sirius Harry defends Snape against him, and I hope Ron finally gets Harry to talk, maybe he says something that sounds like Shadow, or Ron was there in the bathroom from the rant I had earlier when Harry sees Shadow in the mirror. LOL, don't pay attention to this ranting, I just can't stop thinking about it! The point of my review was to tell you how in character everything from Snape and Harry has been, that you have written an ingenious plotline that I adore, and that the idea of MirrorVerse is incredible, and I love that Universes are people. On the whole, YOU ARE INCREDIBLE, AND YOUR STORY IS ONE OF THE BEST I'VE EVER READ!!!! Please update soon!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you SO much for your lovely review - I cannot tell you what a pleasure it was to read. It's brilliant that you're enjoying the story so much and thanks for all the possible ideas you threw in. You actually helped me clarify some points in my own mind, and even give me a couple of ideas (though they will turn out slightly different from your suggestions, I hope you will enjoy them anyway). Oh, and the bit about Harry catching a glimpse of Shadow? That is almost like what happens in a Very-Exciting-Scene I have planned for later. However, I will not spoil it for you now. I hope you continue to enjoy!
| Title: Moving Forward
| 15 Aug 2009 10:58 pm
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| Reviewer: Dana (Anonymous)
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More - I need More!
Why do I even start reading unfinished stories, when I never have the patience..?
Really good story so far.
I really hope Severus and Harry will have a talk soon. All this thinking they know what the other is feeling and no one speaking up... Males!
Author's Response: *scampers off to type* I'm working on it, promise! I'm glad you're enjoying so far - though Harry and Snape really are hopeless at the moment, aren't they? *rolls eyes*
Huh, you're not the evil author I thought you'd be. I thought for sure Kai would turn out to be on the wrong side, especially since you were so ambiguous with him. Will we be seeing him again or is that the end of his character?
I look forward to reading more about Harry and Severus. I hope Severus doesn't get hurt on this mission, because Harry might then regret his choice on how to treat Severus. I'm worried about those boys--update soon!
-P.G.
Author's Response: It was very tempting... but I decided to be good - it would have made Shadow's part too long to fit into the story properly :( Hopefully I'll be able to get back to writing the next bit soon (more developments on the Harry/Severus side coming up...)!
Short but great! I am so curious what happens next. Update? m.
Author's Response: Thanks ;) I'm hoping to get round to it soon!
Ooh stumbled accross the first story a couple of days ago and couldnt stop reading! I dont think I even stopped to review the first part lol, its an interesting storyline that I havent come accross before, I am liking it very much :) although I was screaming nooooo at the end of the last chapter...poor Severus, how can Harry think that not having him around much will make him feel better. I cant wait to see where you are going with the whole thing and hope you are able to update soon :)
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying them both so much! Don't worry about what Severus is doing (the nutter) for I have a cunning plan... ;) Thanks for reviewing!
nice update soon plz
Author's Response: Thanks - will do!
| Title: Moving Forward
| 31 Jul 2009 8:29 am
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| Reviewer: jolisgsd@gmail.com (Anonymous)
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Thanks for updating. I'll try to give you a completely honest review. I liked chapter 13 a lot. I thought that Harry's reaction to Snape's attitude when Snape returned him to the Tower was very understandable. Snape was hurt, so he was a little cold towards Harry and Harry intepreted that as Snape not caring about him. So Harry withdrew mentally. Lots of angst (and I love it! LOL) But then at the end of the chapter, Snape offered to let Harry forget about their relationship for a while. I understand why Snape offered that and you certainly showed Snape's pain at that. Good job, but . . . . I would have expected Harry to see that as Snape wishing to distance himself from Harry -- another way that Snape could get away from having to be a father to Harry. Sure, Snape said he would be there for Harry to talk to, etc., but I think Harry could have thought that Snape was just saying that. So, anyway, I was kind of disappointed that Harry didn't have more of a reaction to Snape's words. I also thought that Snape was unfair to only chastise Harry after his confrontation with Draco. Even if he does talk to Draco later, the chastisement of Harry was public and could have been very humilating for Harry. Plus, of course, there is the fact that Draco was taunting him about something that Harry really does fear (i.e., Snape doesn't want Harry really). So I expected Harry to be more upset about all of that -- not just angry, but hurt.
Anyway, just my thoughts. I really am enjoying your story, especially the Snape/Harry interaction.
Author's Response: Thank you for your honest review - I'm glad you enjoyed it all despite Harry's odd reaction. I was working on the principal that Harry was feeling pressure from all directions and Snape finally realised this - giving him a convenient out while proving that he didn't have to try so hard. However, it's fine if you still consider it odd - it's just how I see it. I will have Harry give it a bit more thought next chapter though! Anyhoo, I'm still creating a few situations, so we'll see - glad you love the angst, 'cos there's bound to be more of it! Thanks again for your all-round comments - I always find those helpful!
aw, poor snape. i want him and harry to make up
Author's Response: Don't worry, they will! I'm working through it :)
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