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Reviews For Broken Wings
If I wanted canon I'd read the books. Seriously people. Harry faces a big choice. I'm sure he'll make the right one. I hope Severus can forgive him. I have a feeling he will think Harry tricked him the whole time and is using the info to laugh at him, etc, etc. Still enjoying this fic! --his
Author's Response: Thanks so much! When I first posted this, some people complained that I was changing too much, but IMO that's what an AU is-- a different universe with a different plot and different characters.
Author's Response: It was something he needed to hear and you're right, it did give us plenty of explanation about why Sev behaved like he did.
Author's Response: Thanks and if you keep reading you'll see that Umbridge does get her just deserts . . .for good and all!
Author's Response: Thanks very much! I am trying to go that route, Melissa. Severus will be discovering who his hawk is in a few more chapters and Umbridge will get what she deserves eventually!
Author's Response: Yes, he did, a lot of things that he never knew about Severus.
Author's Response: yes, that's true, because a cat usually has markings about her eyes and they can look like spectacles. But I've never seen a hawk with a lightning bolt on its head. Too distinctive markings would make an Animagus too easy to identify and to me that defeats the purpse of a form. An Animagus should be able to blend into the natural world and become invisible so to speak. That's the great advantage of a shape shifter, after all. They make great spies.
Not to be unkind, but there a couple of elements of the I don't like as much. The long italicized passages of Snape telling his tale...I think it's an awkward device. It works the exposition in, but it seems strange that he would retell that much to Hagrid. Pulling the story out of the dialog, but still having it presented as if it was told aloud-- it would make more sense if the character was remembering a scene, not retelling it. The second issue I have is that Harry decides to stay a hawk and lie to Sev (I guess this one is a lot more about taste than the last comment). I understand that its useful for him to stay hidden, especially for the plot. Still, he's missing school, lying to the person who has taken care of him... I'm glad that his friends seem to care and feel his absence-- I'm surprized more people aren't up in arms. Shouldn't Minerva be really upset? He's her direct responsibility. And how is this staying out of the Prophet? Every kid must know by now. I'll admit, Harry seems conflicted about staying hidden, and it's a great touch that he's not very good at it. He's just a kid, not a spy. I just think that he can't stay hidden from Snape for too long-- and the longer it goes on the less likely he could realistically be forgiven. Author's Response: Another review asked about that, and while Hagrid knows most of Snape's story, he doesn't know all of it, so some of the things Severus talks about is new to him. Plus Severus just needs to talk about Lily with someone he trusts, and Hagrid is his only option and doesn't mind listening to Severus relate old memories to him. Plus, it was one of the few ways I could think of to allow Harry to hear what he needed anto about Severus and Lily's past without resorting to a Pensieve, because Severus wouldn't just start discussing Lily with his familiar out of the blue. As for Harry decision to stay a hawk, he's still depressed and unsure about himself, he knows he hasn't made a great decision, but he still doesn't know how to transform back yet. He's also afraid of how Severus will react and doesn't want to hurt the man, especially not after hearing about what his life was like. Minerva is upset, but Albus keeps reassuring her that Harry is somewhere on the grounds and that he'll return soon, that he's not hurt and they know Voldemort doesn't have him from Severus's last trip to visit him. And it actually will be in the Prophet very soon, but since this is told mostly from a hawk's perpective, Freedom hasn't gotten around to seeing a copy of the paper yet. The staff has been trying to hush it up as much as they can. You're right, Harry won't be able to keep hidden for much longer, and yes, Severus wouldn't forgive him if he did continue the charade past a certain time. But something will happen soon that will make Harry choose to return to his human form, as you'll see. I'm glad you like my Hagrid, i always felt he wasn't being given enough of a role to play in the books, he was just there for comic relief. I enjoy giving him a more active role and making him Snape's friend and mentor. Thank you for reading and taking the time to review!
I loved this chapter!! Actually, I think that I say that about all of the chapters... but I like this one more. ;-} I loved how you had Severus tell his own story with Lily. You did it very well. I have tried to use the characters to tell the back story before, and it sound very dry, but you did a really great job here, switching back and forth from the present to the past. Very very good. ;-} I also liked Harry/Freedom almost taking offense at Severus saying that he would protect Harry "By whatever means necessary". Poor Sev, He might have a little bit of a problem on his hands with trying to convince Harry of that. ;-} All in all, superb chapter, and I can't wait for the next. Leilia Author's Response: Thanks! I tried to tell it a bit differently, because I wanted you to see Severus's side of things and also Harry's reaction. Yes, Sev might have a problem, especially since Harry is a lot more outgoing as a hawk than he was as a boy. The next one has been posted! |
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