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Reviews For Broken Wings
I'm going to kill you and leave you very dead and even your ancestors will feel it! Go bloody damn figure he's not an Animagus! Well... things certainly got a bit tense for a while there, didn't they? ::claps hands:: I love tense situations! And you included Freedom! I can't wait for the next chapter. ::starts humming high-ho:: Seven chapters to go... Love always, Jewels. Author's Response: Now did I say he wasn't?? Did I?? I never said he couldn;t learn, just that well, he needs a bit of free time to do so. Yes, things were tense and you'll see some more tension in the next chapter. Get ready for the blowout between harry and Ron.
Severus comforting Harry. Best ever! SQUEEEEE! Author's Response: All right! Don't you just love it?
I also enjoyed the occulmemcy lesson, although I hope that Harry doesn't get too good at it too quickly. A young person trying a new skill for the first time vs. an adult that has been practicing for years? A mental dicipline should take time to master. The tantrum was great-- Harry seems like an adolecent--not stupid, but impetuous and emotional. I'm a sucker for the hawk sections and the Hedwig parts are very fun. Author's Response: Yes, there is that particular pureblood (nobility) class attitude that Draco has and one would assume that Crabbe might not be quite as elite since he seems to let Malfoy lord it over him. Or at least he used to. I liked making Crabbe more in depth and well rounded, its fun to take him down a road he's never been before and see if he can grow into a better man than his Death Eater father, perhaps. No fear of Harry getting good quickly, Severus was going easy on him, wanting to see if he could erect the wall and keep it up for a bit, to give him a little confidence boost. That's how I want to portray Harry--he's a troubled kid, but he's also prone to acting just like every other adolescent, emotional and impulsive, though he is working on it. You'll see more of Hedwig too next chapter and things will finally be resolved between Harry and Ron.
Author's Response: No, it's not, and Severus couldn;t let him get away with it and then expect Harry to respect him if he did. And Sev DID let him off the fact that he shifted forms without permission, though I think making Harry talk about his dreams was a kind of punishment to him--at first. I loved Fang and Crabbe, it reminded me of the time I tried to wash my sister's bull terrier--soap and water everywhere, more on me than the dog! You'll see Crabbe change even more in future chapters.
Author's Response: Doesn't it though? She looks like she's freaking out! Run, Dolly, run! Hats off to Mikee!
Author's Response: Thank you1 I updated pretty fast this time and hope I can get the next chapter up soon!
The only part I didn't like about the chapter was when Harry was Freedom and killed the duck. Ooh, I know that when he transforms that he really is that animal and that that is nature, but I didn't like reading how he broke the hawk's neck. It is not a reflection on your writing, it was just hard to read because I don't like seeing any animal killed or hurt even if it's by another one. Good job with the Occlumency. It is what Harry needed to get on the road to recovery. All in all, Harry and Severus are becoming closer, and that's nice to see. Author's Response: No and I like your analogy, it's very apt for what Harry was doing to himself. Yes, I know it's hard to read about animals hunting, but well, that's what a hawk does. and at least the duck didn't suffer. Definitely, and the lessons will also help him with Voldy when the time comes to face him again. Closeness is always a good thing!
Looking forward to your next update--BTW-that sneak peak doesn't look happy at all--are you sure we can't just smack Ron now BEFORE he causes more trouble? (Puppy dog eyes) V. Author's Response: He will, now that he's learned to let go of his guilt and see that he was not to blame for anything that happened that night. Severus will be sure to keep an eye out for that. I think any kind of lesson goes better when all participants are willing to learn and to teach. The book Occluemncy lessons were doomed from the start due to extreme reluctance, distrust, and preconieved notions on both of their parts. Ha--well, if you can catch Ron, feel free to give him one!
Can't wait for the next chapter! Author's Response: Actually, thats's what the owls call the Stymphalian Bird that ate Umbridge. It has iron wings and brass claws. Thanks for reading! More story should be coming soon!
Author's Response: Hahaha! Now that would be FUNNY! And he'd deserve it too! Thanks! :) |
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