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Reviews For Broken Wings
Author's Response: Yeah but I had to save something for the sequel. So I couldn't kill them off just yet.
Author's Response: Yeah i wanted it to be something reptilian but not a snake because that would be too obvious. Severus/Warrior does have a white breast and is otherwise black, there are some goshawks that are colored that way. How did you like the parts with Sirius, Severus, and Harry? And the prank they played on Malfoy? Just wondering.
Please don't kill Sirius! He doesn't deserve to die. Let him live, or Harry will go to pieces. Author's Response: Thanks and you'll see what happens when you read the next chapters!
Crossing my fingers, pressing my thumbs, etc, for Sirius. One bit that was off: Two hawks flying . . .this means me and Severus. But how can this be? By now, WE know that Severus is the other hawk, but Harry doesn't know Severus is a Hawk Animagus at this point. Perhaps something like this: Two Hawks flying... Harry knew he was one of them, but who was the other? And what role did Severus play in this prophesy? I am really enjoying this story, and the alterations you are making. Harry's relationship with Severus is lovely. Thanks for writing. K Author's Response: If you hurry and read the next chapter you might find out a way that Sirius can be saved. That bit about Harry pondering the prophecy. . .he knows Severus is involved because of the tag on the globe which says Severus, Harry, and Voldemort. So he reasons that obviously Voldemort is the darkness and therefore that must mean the "two hawks" refer to him and Severus. Himself he can understand, but he doesn't know that Severus is an Animagus and that's why he says "How can this be?" Although the symbolism of the prophecy might not be taken literally . . .he knows it can be. Sorry if that felt unclear. Harry will eventually discover Severus's Animagus form. Thanks for reading!
Author's Response: Thanks, so glad you liked it!
Author's Response: Thanks, i wasn;t sure at first if I should have Voldy die, but in the endit seemed to fit better with the plot line.
I like Sev's form-- I feel like the story has been building up to it. Voldemort, though... I'm not as excited about. It seems inevitable that he would be a reptile, so it's never a surprise when it happens. It was useful for him to change so that the hawks could rip him apart, but that's exactly why it seems like something he wouldn't do. Why change to a more vulnerable form? How could he afford to not be able to cast spells when facing Dumbledore? He could have just put a boot on Siri's throat to threaten him. But far be it from me to rain all over the victory parade-- it was nice to see Voldy torn in half. Heck, it was great to see that whole scene rewritten as if a group of intelligent people had a coordinated plan (as opposed to the SNAFU in cannon). Author's Response: That's true, I didn't want to do too many perspectives because it might have confused people, plus I was mostly narrating it from Freedom/Harry's POV. You're right, Severus was always intended to be a hawk Animagus. As for Voldy, I left him a reptile because of the outward characteristics he displays in the books, but I didn't want him to be a snake since that was too obvious. Why did he transform? He didn;t notice the hawks, he was too busy fighting Albus to pay attention to them, and he was tired as well from fighting the old wizard, almost exhausted his magic, so he used his other form to intimidate and threaten Albus because he knew that Albus would be very upset if Sirius died. In short, Voldy got cocky and he paid for it. I'm glad you liked the way I re-did this, I always thought it was ridiculous that the Order couldn't move their asses fast enought to prevent the whole thing and not let kids go and fight criminals.
Author's Response: Thanks I'm glad you enjoyed Warrior's appearance and Freedom's too. As for Sirius . . .only time will tell.
~Frosty Author's Response: Thanks! I know, just when things start to look up . . .but it'll work out! More is up now!
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked that little bit, i thought it'd be a neat twist to let Tonks use her powers and Charlie too! I loved the goshawk, that's why I chose it. As for Sirius, you just need to wait and see what happens! Lucius and Bella are horrid. |
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