That's funny, when Snape said that another teacher would not be as lenient as he? As if!
I was kind of surprised when Snape made the reference to Harry's eyes being like Lilys. Not like him to reveal something so personal. I guess that he couldn't help himself.
Poor Harry, thinking that he doesn't deserve to be fed, or to be treated well.
I'm so glad that we seem to have new writers on here now, who like you, are proving to write original new takes on old, familiar storylines. Nicely done.
This is very nicely written, and I like the originality of Harry being in Slyterhin, but may I make a small suggestion? I don't know whether you've done it purposely off or if it happened when you posted your story, but it is difficult to read the last bit, because it is one long paragraph.
But it is a nice start and I'm off to read the next chapter!
Ooh, I like the way that you've manipulated Canon events to suit your story. I can't wait to read more.
I like how you changed the way Harry became a Seeker, flying blind is even harder than catching a Remembrall.
Now what could Dumbledore want? To tell Harry he shouldn't be allowed to play Seeker for Slytherin?
Now I want to strangle Dumbledore. Poor Harry! I hope Sev can help him heal and then they should send Dumbledore over to live with the Dursleys for a few months.
| Title: Chapter 5
| 28 Mar 2009 1:33 pm
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| Reviewer: fanficaholic (Anonymous)
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Great chapter! Can't wait for more!
Wow, speedy update. Thanks! Both chapters were great. I totally could hear the "Dun Dun Duuuunnnnnn" at the end of the last chapter.
| Title: Chapter 5
| 28 Mar 2009 6:44 am
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| Reviewer: Fawkes (Anonymous)
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Ooh, I wonder what Albus is doing...
Good story.
I like the new take on Harry gets sorted into Slytheirn and is an abused little kid.
I look forward to your next update.
This is a great story. The first chapters were great. I'm just curious; is Dumbles going to be a bad guy in this one, or is he just really blinded by his idea of the 'greater good?' Hmmm...
I also love your characterization of Snape. He doesn't seem to want to like Harry, but then he can't really hate one of his Slytherins. You portrayed that mini battle perfectly. Your doing a wonderful job on this fic. I cannot wait for more. Thanks.
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