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Reviews For Lily's Charm: Legacy
---my world has just been rocked. i can't wait! best H/G fight scene I'VE EVER SEEN!
Honestly, I thought it was quite realistic during my first read through, but the second time I stopped to admire your wording in the first two paragraphs of the section: "Harry smiled as he heard that soft, familiar voice in his dreams. He heard it again and then someone was shaking him. Scowling at the abrupt end to his fantasy, Harry dragged his eyes open and then he sat up abruptly, his neck screaming in protest. Dreaming; he was dreaming. That was the only way Ginny could be standing in front of his closed door in her pajamas. As if he was pulled by puppeteer’s strings, Harry felt himself rising from the bed." I love how you mess with the reader's mind right there; you've successfully made it very ambiguous and I think you could really go either way with the story now. Personally, I do think it's a dream because Severus' door was open and he wouldn't sleep through the Floo spitting someone out--he's been a spy for too long to miss something that obvious. He would not allow Harry and Ginny to just go at it in the middle of the night either; even though he taught Harry the Contraceptive Charm, I really don't think he'd like the idea of them getting it on the next room. Of course, I will be pleased if it is real because then Severus might walk in on them and that would make a delightfully awkward moment. They do need to make up and it seemed like a lot of the things that needed to be said between them were voiced; they were also very honest about Hermione, which would be a good course for them too. Going back to the beginning, I'm almost a bit sad that Harry didn't blurt out what happened to Ron and George or barf on someone's shoes. I thought he'd crack under pressure, but Harry surprised me. I loved the awkwardness between them though, especially on Harry's part since it was misread by George and Ron completely. I look forward to the Quidditch match also--I wonder if Hermione will show and what Harry and Draco might talk about. Please update soon, EDQ! -P.G.
If that turns out to be a dream I'm going to kill you :) Loved this chapter It was exactly what I have been waiting for the whole time. I hope that there will be some more talking with the Weasley's. One half apology just doesn't cut it for me Loving the quick updates
The apology scene between Harry, Ron and George was very good - they were all so awkward albeit for different reasons. Looking forward to the next chapter.
If she IS indeed in Harry's bedroom...in her PJ's...and this is the middle of the night...oh she's going to be in some BIG trouble with her parents. (Wait...why WOULD she be wearing a bra with her pajamas? Now I'm back to thinking he's dreaming.) Oh, you are evil OE. Evil, evil, evil....;)
Squeeee!!!!! Ooh, tell me it was real? But did Ginny come in the morning? I'm a little confused! I'm sure all the Harry and Hermione lovers are going to be disappointed if this was real, but I'm dancing on the desk at work!!!!! :) Long live Ginny and Harry!! (Oops, better duck, the tomatoes are coming my way from all the H&H shippers out there!) Best chappie yet!!!! Oh, it is so true that the best part of having an arguement, is making up afterwards. I'm sure that that is Harry's philosophy now!! Oh...but I hope that they are not making any redheaded babies. Sev'll kill him!! :)
I'm glad too, that Ron and George came to apologize, but I wonder if Ron will be as understanding about the situation as Ginny was... And you wrote the scene between Harry, Ron, and George very well, I could tell how awkward it was for all of them, though for different reasons. And now I just have to wonder how far Harry and Ginny are going to go, and if Severus is still sleeping. Looking forward to the next chapter! |
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