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Title: His Deepest Secret Revealed 15 Apr 2009 9:33 pm
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, that was very nice! The moment Harry started stalking Snape I started to think, "Does this boy have a death wish or something?" Lol. I'm so shocked that Snape didn't hear Harry gasp when he got naked--Harry would have been more than dead if was caught; he'd be tortured and pulverized! I do like the idea of Snape being a jellyfish though; very cool. Now the poor professor is going to be all paranoid about who sent the gift; I bet he'd figure it out, lol, and then the poo would hit the fan.

    My one suggestion for improvement is that I don't think you need the divider between the first and second paragraphs. I know the purpose of it is to give background before you complete the story, but it would flow just fine without it.

    I enjoyed this work--nice job!

    -P.G.

    Author's Response: Thank you for your review! Harry was particularly carefree and daring, wasn't he? *grin* Snape didn't hear him making any noise thanks to the spells and charms Harry had put on himself. I should have explained better, I guess. Thank you, Mila
Title: His Deepest Secret Revealed 15 Apr 2009 9:20 pm
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    That was great! Who would have thought of that form? But I'll admit, it was scary! At first i thought it was going to be a barracuda or a shark. One story I read had Snape become an orca. But a jellyfish is cool too!

    They scare me though. Especially the big ones.

    I like how Harry found out Sev's secret and didn't say anything and sent him a Christmas present. So sweet! I also liked how you gave Harry back a small piece of his childhood.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you for your review!

    Jellyfish are horribly scary, aren't they?

    Writing carefree Harry was very pleasurable. I like your small-Harry stories for Harry's easy demeanour and happiness. I wanted to write something positive too, but I'm not brave enough to write small kids :)


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