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Reviews For His Deepest Secret Revealed
My one suggestion for improvement is that I don't think you need the divider between the first and second paragraphs. I know the purpose of it is to give background before you complete the story, but it would flow just fine without it. I enjoyed this work--nice job! -P.G. Author's Response: Thank you for your review! Harry was particularly carefree and daring, wasn't he? *grin* Snape didn't hear him making any noise thanks to the spells and charms Harry had put on himself. I should have explained better, I guess. Thank you, Mila
They scare me though. Especially the big ones. I like how Harry found out Sev's secret and didn't say anything and sent him a Christmas present. So sweet! I also liked how you gave Harry back a small piece of his childhood. Author's Response: Thank you for your review! Jellyfish are horribly scary, aren't they? Writing carefree Harry was very pleasurable. I like your small-Harry stories for Harry's easy demeanour and happiness. I wanted to write something positive too, but I'm not brave enough to write small kids :) |
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