Potions and Snitches
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Title: Prologue 11 Oct 2009 2:24 am
Reviewer: celestialuna (Signed) [Report This]
    Good start of story!!
Title: Prologue 17 May 2009 6:28 pm
Reviewer: KimSpiritTalks (Signed) [Report This]
    This looks like it might become very interesting. Lily and Sev are both alive, the Voldy thing is dead, there are twins, and they're about to meet up at camp? Cool! Can't wait to go on.

    Author's Response: Yep. I think it will be interesting. Thanks to you for the encouragement. Also, thanks must go to Ponytail Goddess for giving me the prompt for the story.
Title: Prologue 17 May 2009 4:44 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Very interesting start here, it's funny to think of Severus living among the Amish though.

    I did notice that there was a small typo. You wrote She had sent her son, Harry, off to Norris Lake Quidditch Camp in the US for the next eight weeks. Not for the first time in the last ten years, her thoughts turned to her other son, Harry, and her ex-husband, Severus Snape.

    Shouldn't it be "her other son--William"? Since she has Harry, right?

    Author's Response: Thank you for pointing that out. I will correct it ASAP!
Title: Prologue 16 May 2009 4:51 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    William and Harry? Too funny. Two little Princes. Just perfect.

    This is your second story, right? When I saw the summary, I was really anxious to read it. First, because YOUR'RE writing it, and secondly, because it's sounds like it's going to be hilarious. Can't wait to read the next chapter.

    I'm glad to see that you're going to make this longer, because based on the first chapter, it's going to be great! :)

    Author's Response: "...I was really anxious to read it. First, because YOUR'RE writing it..." Dawn, you have a little brown on your nose, dear... Thanks for reading and reviewing my stories. I am grateful for loyal supporters like you.
Title: Prologue 16 May 2009 8:34 am
Reviewer: little-sun (Signed) [Report This]
    Haha, it reminds me of the book about the girltwins in the same situation (senza magic) sent to a summer camp. Lovely to be reminded of that wonderful book! I am curious if the boys are looking just the same and if they switch after getting back from the camp :) Mila

    Author's Response: Yep. It is following the basic plot of the Parent Trap (1998 version of the movie) with some minor, yet obvious, changes. Please, continue to read and review, and thanks!
Title: Prologue 16 May 2009 7:58 am
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    You have no idea how happy you have made me by answering my challenge, Phoenix! The Amish idea is cool! I take it Severus is living their lifestyle? He would be used to old-fashioned living, so it makes sense.

    I can't wait to see what the boys get up to at Quidditch Camp! My one small critique of this chapter is that in this sentence: "Not for the first time in the last ten years, her thoughts turned to her other son, Harry, and her ex-husband, Severus Snape," you wrote Harry's name instead of William's. It's an easy correction to make though and the sentence is in the second to last paragraph if you want to correct it.

    Nice work!

    -P.G.

    Author's Response: Thanks for pointing that out, PG. Our EDQ convinced me to change which boy stayed with which parent after I wrote the prologue, and I missed that spot when I changed it around...

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