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Reviews For Harry Potter's Parent Trap
Author's Response: Yep. I think it will be interesting. Thanks to you for the encouragement. Also, thanks must go to Ponytail Goddess for giving me the prompt for the story.
I did notice that there was a small typo. You wrote She had sent her son, Harry, off to Norris Lake Quidditch Camp in the US for the next eight weeks. Not for the first time in the last ten years, her thoughts turned to her other son, Harry, and her ex-husband, Severus Snape. Shouldn't it be "her other son--William"? Since she has Harry, right? Author's Response: Thank you for pointing that out. I will correct it ASAP!
This is your second story, right? When I saw the summary, I was really anxious to read it. First, because YOUR'RE writing it, and secondly, because it's sounds like it's going to be hilarious. Can't wait to read the next chapter. I'm glad to see that you're going to make this longer, because based on the first chapter, it's going to be great! :) Author's Response: "...I was really anxious to read it. First, because YOUR'RE writing it..." Dawn, you have a little brown on your nose, dear... Thanks for reading and reviewing my stories. I am grateful for loyal supporters like you.
Author's Response: Yep. It is following the basic plot of the Parent Trap (1998 version of the movie) with some minor, yet obvious, changes. Please, continue to read and review, and thanks!
I can't wait to see what the boys get up to at Quidditch Camp! My one small critique of this chapter is that in this sentence: "Not for the first time in the last ten years, her thoughts turned to her other son, Harry, and her ex-husband, Severus Snape," you wrote Harry's name instead of William's. It's an easy correction to make though and the sentence is in the second to last paragraph if you want to correct it. Nice work! -P.G. Author's Response: Thanks for pointing that out, PG. Our EDQ convinced me to change which boy stayed with which parent after I wrote the prologue, and I missed that spot when I changed it around... |
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