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Reviews For Yes Sir
Title: Yes Sir 09 Jun 2009 10:38 pm
Reviewer: Potterworm (Signed) [Report This]
    This was really well-written. I liked the lack of happy-go-luckiness, as it made it seem more realistic.

    Author's Response: Thanks! I was a bit afraid how people would take it, but so far so good:-)
Title: Yes Sir 09 Jun 2009 10:21 pm
Reviewer: Lianne (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh sh*t!

    Well, that was terrible... A good and very realistic story! I liked the way it is written; there are no long unnecessary introductions into the situation - you just showed the moment you wanted and nothing else; if the reader wants to know more, he has to create the backround story in his head himself.

    I think the sequel is not needed, still, it's your choice.

    Author's Response: Man, the first two sentences had me really scared! Glad you like it, I agree with you on the fact a sequel isn't needed, I also like the fact the whole background is left to the imagination and that's how it probably should stay. Thanks for a nice review:-)
Title: Yes Sir 09 Jun 2009 1:53 pm
Reviewer: Aethyr (Signed) [Report This]
    I rather enjoyed this story. You should definitely continue; it has such potential. I would like to see what Snape does with the revelation and how he intends to rectify the situation.

    Some criticisms (I hope you don't find them disheartening; I think critique is immensely useful!):

    Snape's language is inconsistent. At some points, his vocabulary and diction seem naturally well-polished; at others, his speech is quite coarse and common. (E.g. "Relying on potions for such trivialities may well get you addicted, you fool," vs. "Now stop fidgeting and get your lazy ass in here!") Pick one and stick with it.

    I think you went a bit overboard with Harry's sarcasm in his head. A nice touch, but too much of it is distracting.

    Carry on, I say! Thanks for posting this, and I hope to see a Chapter Two!

    Author's Response:

    Thanks! Out of all the reviewers you were the only one to actually offer some critique, which is great. I must agree with you on the inconsistency of Snape's speech, guess I got carried away...

    As to continuing, I doubt I will continue this story because it feels completed to me, and honestly I don't know if I could do the sequel justice, but never say never;-)

Title: Yes Sir 09 Jun 2009 10:48 am
Reviewer: angelauthor14 (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow, this was really well written. Extremely sad, but powerful and realistic to the characters. I hope to see more of your work soon!

    Author's Response: Thanks! Always nice to know people like what I've written:-) You made my day!
Title: Yes Sir 09 Jun 2009 2:17 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    OmG, that was so sad, so sweet, but really really heartbreaking and well-written of course

    Welcome to the board. We are so pleased to have you. I'm really looking forward to reading more from you.

    Author's Response: Thaks! I am happy you liked the story:-)
Title: Yes Sir 09 Jun 2009 1:34 am
Reviewer: BasiliskPrince (Signed) [Report This]
    Nice! I enjoyed reading this and I loved that touch of added detail with the kinetic energy! I would love to read more!

    Author's Response: Thanks! I am happy you liked my story:-) As to a sequel, I might consider it;-)
Title: Yes Sir 09 Jun 2009 1:29 am
Reviewer: RhiannanT (Signed) [Report This]
    Eep. This is very disturbing to me. Good, but disturbing as all hell. I like your Harry - sarcastic even (or especially) when in pain. Nicely done.

    Author's Response: Tell me about it! Imagine being the one who wrote it, now that's what I call really disturbing;-)
Title: Yes Sir 09 Jun 2009 1:03 am
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed) [Report This]
    Fantastic story. Poignant and horrifying, but very well-written and true to Snape's canon characteristics. You kept him in character, even though he is Harry's guardian in this story, and it's hard to find a story like that anymore...

    I also appreciate how you implied the Dursley abuse without going into detail...you did the same with Snape's thrashing--much more effective that way. Nice work. Hope to see more from you!!

    Author's Response: Thanks:-) I tried really hard to keep Snape in character, sometimes I feel the fandom Snape is way too perfect to be believed. I was kind of worried people would shout at me for being too nasty,  which is why I'm really happy you liked it!

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