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Author's Response: Thanks! I was a bit afraid how people would take it, but so far so good:-)
Well, that was terrible... A good and very realistic story! I liked the way it is written; there are no long unnecessary introductions into the situation - you just showed the moment you wanted and nothing else; if the reader wants to know more, he has to create the backround story in his head himself. I think the sequel is not needed, still, it's your choice. Author's Response: Man, the first two sentences had me really scared! Glad you like it, I agree with you on the fact a sequel isn't needed, I also like the fact the whole background is left to the imagination and that's how it probably should stay. Thanks for a nice review:-)
Some criticisms (I hope you don't find them disheartening; I think critique is immensely useful!): Snape's language is inconsistent. At some points, his vocabulary and diction seem naturally well-polished; at others, his speech is quite coarse and common. (E.g. "Relying on potions for such trivialities may well get you addicted, you fool," vs. "Now stop fidgeting and get your lazy ass in here!") Pick one and stick with it. I think you went a bit overboard with Harry's sarcasm in his head. A nice touch, but too much of it is distracting. Carry on, I say! Thanks for posting this, and I hope to see a Chapter Two! Author's Response: Thanks! Out of all the reviewers you were the only one to actually offer some critique, which is great. I must agree with you on the inconsistency of Snape's speech, guess I got carried away... As to continuing, I doubt I will continue this story because it feels completed to me, and honestly I don't know if I could do the sequel justice, but never say never;-)
Author's Response: Thanks! Always nice to know people like what I've written:-) You made my day!
Welcome to the board. We are so pleased to have you. I'm really looking forward to reading more from you. Author's Response: Thaks! I am happy you liked the story:-)
Author's Response: Thanks! I am happy you liked my story:-) As to a sequel, I might consider it;-)
Author's Response: Tell me about it! Imagine being the one who wrote it, now that's what I call really disturbing;-)
I also appreciate how you implied the Dursley abuse without going into detail...you did the same with Snape's thrashing--much more effective that way. Nice work. Hope to see more from you!! Author's Response: Thanks:-) I tried really hard to keep Snape in character, sometimes I feel the fandom Snape is way too perfect to be believed. I was kind of worried people would shout at me for being too nasty, which is why I'm really happy you liked it! |
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