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Reviews For My Enemy's Enemy
Um, you mean thought not think in the second last line. x Author's Response: Ah have to wait and see-will be explained further on in the fic eventually! Can't say yet will give too much away... Yeah sorry I know there's typos in there -I've just got a beta and will be gradually going through and amending stuff :)
Author's Response: Yeah everything else goes out the window when it comes to the people Harry cares about! He just can't help himself.
Author's Response: Yes Harry tries to behave but it all goes out the window when it comes to people he cares about! Thanks for the review and hope you like the next chapter.
Snape is his own snarky self, full of misconseptions, and Harry fiery and lonely adolesent under heavy pressure - perfect duo... That's what I call torn between two wishes - I would like to see next part asap, though I feel almoust inevitable looming. (( *apprehensive glance at warnings* Dread. But please, please, update! Author's Response: Thank you. I really want to see if I can manage to keep Snape in character throughout this even as he gets closer to Harry! I also think Harry wears his heart on his sleeve and can't help showing people what he feels but Snape would want to hide his feelings from everyone. Next chapter hopefully won't be too long :)
You have some issues with spelling and grammar... the spell for Legilimency is Legilimens (you've had a couple of different spellings). One of the last lines: "Severus think he had actually listened to him." (think should be thought) In other chapters: pijamas should be pyjamas (assuming british spelling) in: "when they found out he had ran away from him" (had ran should be had run, which is the pluperfect.) There were a few others that I noticed, but the story itself is so fabulous, that I am well and truly hooked. More! (adding to favorites) Author's Response: Ah yes the angst-I'm afraid there's lots more of that headed this way! As for the spelling and grammar *blushes* I will amend all those errors as soon as I get a sec. I tend to type like a mad thing and give it a quick (and obviously not particularly thorough) read through. Opps. Cheers for pointing them out... Lots more of this story to come, next chapter is half written but I am starting a new job and flat seaching at the mo so I've been a bit busy lol :) Thanks for reviewing.
Author's Response: Yes Snape and Harry will be reaching an understanding although it may not seem like it's headed that way at times! Watch this space re Sirius... Thanks for taking the time to review :)
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it:)
I love how you keep Snape in character, and Harry too. Poor Harry though, I wish that someone would tell him what's going on. Poor kid. Author's Response: Am working on the next chapter and trying to keep them both in character cos it all gets a bit crazy...Harry's gonna find out more soon. Thanks for reviewing! :) |
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