Everyone seems to really hate Severus but its wrong for everyone (like Molly & Ollivansder) to think his children would be like him. Especially seeing as only one of the children is biological his - also would they not have also been influenced by Sirius, Remus and their own biological mother as well.
| Title: Chapter 1
| 26 Jul 2010 5:16 am
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| Reviewer: Fred (Anonymous)
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I had a idea like this except that Hermione would be Hermione Granger and it would be a harry/harmione.. I also was going to include Remus but I was going to have Sirius living w/ them.... I just wanted to let you know so you that you didn't think that I was copying. I hope to have an account in a few days but I'm so busy w/ college at Oxford that I don't have the chance. Look for Silver Raven on this site and on fan fiction.net and harry potter fan fiction.
Cheers,
Fred
This is an interesting beginning. I like how you have Sirius and Remus involved and friends with Severus, harry, and Hermione. Can't wait to see how the Sorting goes. It seems like Molly is being prejudiced against Severus and Slytherins. Ollivander seemed kind of creepy, but maybe that was because he was dealing with Snape's kids.
This is a creative twist. Hermione and Harry as siblings is a cute idea :) Though, Molly and Olivander seem OOC... I take it you're not a Weasley fan? *pouts* Oh well, it's your story and I'm glad Sirius and Remus will be involved in Harry’s life.
| Title: Chapter 1
| 30 Jun 2009 7:43 am
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| Reviewer: fanficaholic (Anonymous)
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I like this story!! Can't wait for more!!
That was a great start...I thought you would have a couple of chapters of them growing up as Snapes but I this way is good too!!
I think they should be friends with Neville but not Ron xx
Maybe Draco can be sorted into whatever house they are sorted into and becomes friends xx
Oh wow. This is an interesting twist on events. I can't wait to read more.
So Hermione and Harry are growing up to be brother and sister.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
What's with Ollivander?
With the number of wizards & witches he has to deal with, shouldn't he be a little more Neutral?
| Title: Chapter 1
| 29 Jun 2009 9:27 pm
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| Reviewer: Ann on a mouse (Anonymous)
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Please find a beta. There are numerous issues with this fic that make it difficult to read. Notably, you seem to have significant confusion over te use of "their" and "they're."
The dramatically out-of-characterness of this fic is not my cup of tea, but it would be better if it were more readable.
Author's Response: Do you know anyone that will beta this for me. I'm really trying hard not to make mistakes and I'm using a computer spell check but it seems that it's not catching them all. Thanks for the review and please e-mail me at witchhex29@yahoo.com
| Title: Chapter 1
| 29 Jun 2009 9:15 pm
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| Reviewer: gin (Anonymous)
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good story.but snape found hermione and he loves her other hand he wants lily alive but not say amything about harry.thats mean snape love hermione than harry
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