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Reviews For A Different Life For Harry
I like the general idea of this story. but it's still a bit choppy (as compared to the other two chapters)...hopefully this'll improve as I continue reading. As well, you should try to develop character (by creating longer descriptions and conversations). I think there's a lot of potential here. g'luck! ~shige
This is really different, and I like that Hermione is Harry's sister. I always thought that their relationship was like brother and sister. Too cute.
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