Its nice that for a change its Draco whose not the nasty bully, but Ron Weasley. Though I do hope that Draco doesn't get it from Lucius about being sorted into Gryffindor - its the hat's fault not his! Severus is very protective of his children. Like he needs to have protection charms on them, or a safety portkey or simply something that will alert him if anything happens to them. Wonder if they might became friends with either Draco or Neville?
so yeah, what I said a couple minutes earlier...
it's gotten a little better. again, I would strongly encourage you to lengthen conversations and develop your characters a little bit. other than that, I have to say that I'm looking forward to your next chapter.
~shige
| Title: Chapter 5
| 09 Sep 2009 7:56 am
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| Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous)
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Great chapter, its still wierd about Ron, but i am glad harry and hermione had a good childhood with sev. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Ooh, goody. They got caught. I can't wait to see what happens when Snape gets a hold of them.
Good chappie. Looking forward to seeing the excitement in the next.
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