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Reviews For Where Once Was Light
-P.G. Author's Response: O don't worry so much! Keep going! *cheers from the side lines* You're on a roll! And thanks for a review!!
And I actually do have to wonder how mixed his feelings truly are. I think perhaps once he's adjusted to the shock that he will be overjoyed to have a child, a part of himself and of Lily. Poor Harry. I was so sorry for him, and I loved how he is concerned and protective of his father too. I am also very upset with Petunia. I don't know if she goes along with the abuse because she is afraid of Vernon or what, but there is still no excuse, imho, for an adult to accept and participate in the abuse of a child. I hope she gets a comeuppance too. Wonderful chapter! Author's Response: Glad you liked it...again! Don't worry about Petunia too much. Things will all get explained. Thanks again for the review!!
Ah, well, that explains why Petunia would think it would go to him, being addressed to him...In the journal, it is a very modern phrase to "update someone." This phrase is relatively new and especially only came into major usage once the internet became easily accessible. Since we are in around...1980, the phrase "keep updating to you," is quite ahead of its time. May I suggest something like, "keep writing to you?" Aww, poor Severus. Dreaming of how things were supposed to be. He should take a piece of wisdom from Lily there and eventually come to the realization that Harry/Severin is his last link to her, now. Although it seems both of them are trying to remind themselves that it's "Harry...his son..." or "Snape...his father..." They are trying to take it in and accept it... HA! The idea of Severus "crashing through the ceiling" is hilarious for some reason. Of course, my brain pictured it like a classic cartoon where the floor is cut in the circle and they literally crash through. *snort* Oh no! Here's Vernon! I almost feel bad for Petunia here because she has to put up her act again around Vernon and her son. I do not blame Harry for eating both plates, but then again I do at the same time. I do agree he would do that, but on the same plane, as the reader it makes me sad that he didn't have that Gryffindor courage to wake Severus up to eat, because then we would have had a forced sort of conversation. But, Severus also does need to sleep, so there I do agree with him. And it is interesting how the roles seem reverse there at the end, with Harry acting almost parental to his father by putting the journal away and tucking him in. Once Snape figures out that Vernon beat his son and that he slept through it the poor man wil be even more overwhelmed with guilt than now. I have a feeling things will not look better in the morning. (Unless Severus' parental instincts flare to life at this knowledge. Either way, for someone in 4 Privet Drive things will not look better in the morning.) Huzzah, on your remarkable update speed, and solid plotline. Typo Time: "Clutching the handrail, the Potions Master’s decent was slow, but steady..." The word "ascent" should be used, not "descent." Ascent is to go upwards, descent is to go downwards. "This James Potter drone, this Gryffindor abomination was really his?" I think you would rather use "clone" than "drone," as the word drone's definition to apply to a person in any way is most commonly used to describe their voice/speaking (e.g. "...Professor Binns droned endlessly in History of Magic class...") or somewhat their state of life (i.e. "a person who does tedious or menial work; a drudge; a person who lives on the labor of other; parsitic loafer.") Either, way, it seems you meant clone. "I am not sure that I can bare the thought of not having you, so I am writing..." You used the wrong "bare/bear." "Bare" implies to strip, to remove, nakedness..., while "bear" implies to suffer, endure, undergo...Change "bare" to "bear." In the journal, "He said that James is an utter wreak without me and even..." Change "wreak" to "wreck." Spelling is off: "Lunch had been completely forgotten this afternoon in favor of discovering hidden truthes." Remove the "e" to get "truths." Again, change "bare" to "bear" in the following: "The young wizard did not think he could bare it if the older wizard..." This is strictly grammatical, but in this sentence, "There was not as much force behind the blows either, for which the young wizard was glad of," you do not need the last word, "of." That is taken care of by the phrase, "for which." Author's Response: You know, every time you show me my typos I always hit myself in the head and say, "I should caught that!" *shakes head at self* I'm usually the one that drives people crazy when I edit, so it's actually a good change in pace to have someone tell me what I'm doing wrong for a change. When I'd write papers at school and have other students edit it, they'd never really do anything so I'd have to have teachers check it over all the time! But I dygress... Thanks again for another wonderful review! I'm glad you liked it! Don't worry about Harry's slight change in character, it'll be explained later (if you haven't guessed yet) but this will be one of the first baby steps into something bigger. And I'm glad you liked Snape bursting through the ceiling too. I could picture it too with him just suddenly blowing the roof down and what not! *HA* And I guess you'll have to wait until next time to see how "good" of morning everyone will have! *wink* Thanks again!!:)
And remember that Dumbledore really needs something like a punishment. His actions were cruel. Author's Response: o.O Wow, thanks!! I was actually thinking of posting it somewhere else since the Harry Potter fansite rejected my story *grumble, snort,rage* But I'm okay with that now. And don't worry, Dumbledore's not off the hook, he's just avoiding it right now. Thanks for the review!!
Some spy he is. Author's Response: Well...I kind thought about that too, but I figured he was too tired to hear a whole lot, plus Harry really didn't yell. I figured that since I'm a light sleeper usually and when I'm sick I sleep through LOTS of stuf, it would be okay if Snape did too. Thanks for the review though!
Author's Response: Aww, don't worry, things always get better...after they get worse...um...does that make you feel any better? Anywho, Thanks for the review!!
Author's Response: No worries, things'll get better! Thanks for the review!!!
Author's Response: Thank ya kindly!!!
Author's Response: They will...eventually...Thanks for the review!!
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