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Reviews For Where Once Was Light
I look forward to reading more! -P.G. Author's Response: Well, Harry's doesn't quite know what to think at the moment, and he was so nervous seeing his father in class that he hasn't quite grasped the whole situation completely. Plus there's the fact that that morning he had been afraid that Snape was in the hospital or something after talking to Draco. But on the whole, he is a pretty tough character. Thanks for reading, P.G.!!
I'm so glad Harry's first potions class of the year went well. I totally couldn't resist that one. Also, yay for father-son time. I was missing that between Harry and Sev, and I hope they'll have more opportunities in the near future. Draco and Theo are rather interesting... I'm curious to see what they're up to, if anything. Go Minerva! Sev needed someone to blow off steam to. When you mentioned that Severus felt like stomping his foot like a first year, I totally sympathized with him. I was in a horrible mood when I went to work today and totally stomped my foot when I was assigned something I didn't want to do. lol. Oops. I totally need a vacation, or just be able to hole up for a week and actually get enough sleep. Great chapter, Ivy, and I can't wait for more. :) Author's Response: Yay! Five points to you, Ella! Good job! And Yep, father-son time made a come back. I needed to get some other things out of the way before coming back to it. And they'll get more time to bond a bit later on. After all, the Triwizard Tournament's coming up... And Draco's thinking over a few things while Nott's action are a bit more...harmless. And yep! Minerva's totally awesome in this. Severus needed to vent I think. But sorry you had a bad day. Oops on the stomping bit. Oh well, as long as no one sees it...(I've done it too) But my major flaw is I tend to either be really sarcastic when I'm mad or if I have to be quiet, I roll my eyes a lot. But you can roll your eyes or stomp your feet if you want, whatever makes you happy! ^_^ But maybe you should try sleeping, I hear it's good for you. ;) Thanks for another great review Ella! Still awaiting your update too!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! And you're right, I did just write. I wanted it to sound exactly how I felt, and I desperately wanted to portray the emotions and the image I had in my head. I'm very glad it turned out all right then. Thanks so much for the lovely review!
Ron needs to calm down! I don't even like Ron all that much in canon, and this only makes me dislike him more. (What a poor excuse for a best friend.) "“You’ve been a snake in lions clothing all this time, haven’t you?” Ron scowled." *smacks Ron in the face* HA! Ron's image of "snakes crawling out from under Snape's robes like he was some sort of demon!" That's hilarious! "...yet it comforted Harry to realize that his father was always going to be there to watch out for him." This strikes me as foreboding! What if Severus isn't always around to watch him? Trouble, trouble, boil and bubble, methinks. Good choice though, Harry, to keep that secret a secret. Don't tell Ron. He'd blab it to everyone! (Can't stand Ron.) "I’d’ve thought you’d be happy to see me even in Slytherin green since you spent the last month thinking I was dead.”" GO HARRY! That was a good slap-in-the-face! Interesting Divination class there. So, Severus is a Light Seer then...interesting. Hmmm, and Harry is suspicious that Trelawney knows. Draco wishing Harry would get detention was funny. Poor Draco, I can see him scowl into his cake before spearing it intending to enjoy it as much as possible. Oh, that last paragraph had my heart aching for Severus. Typo Alerts: "...he had to worry about people coming to kill and/or harm he and his child, and sprinkled on top that the fact of the matter was that no one could even know he had a son." Still should read, "him and his child," and "and sprinkled on top that the fact," you need something like the word "of" between "top" and "that," with a comma after "that," otherwise it reads a bit awkwardly. Draco's dialogue: "...quite frankly, I don’t like ite ither.”" Should be "it either." "...they would not let the Slytherin’s pick on Harry..." No apostrophe is needed in Slytherins. "The Potions Master looked completely different as he stood there now then from when he had been their earlier that morning." "Then" should be "than." "“Thought Slytherin’s didn’t like muggle-borns..." Same as before, no apostrophe is needed in Slytherins. Also, when you have something in quotations like, "E," the comma or period goes within the quotation, not outside of it. "In fact, her bug eyes got even wide, if possible,..." Should be "wider." "This year, Hogwarts has been chosen to participate in a competition called the Triwizard Tournaments.” I believe it is a singular "Tournament," rather than plural. "In fact there was a vain in the Potions Master’s neck..." Wrong spelling. You need "vein." "Frankly, Harry thought the whole thing sound a bit ridicules." Do you mean, "ridiculous?" "...Snape snapped to attention, his body ridged and his wand close at hand." Do you mean "rigid?" Author's Response: That's okay, I understand. I mean, I faded away a bit in your story too before I was able to catch up. No worries, it'll still be here for you later when you have time. ^_^ Hope things calm down for you! Now, yes, Ron's being a prat. He's going through what I've been calling his moody puberty stage, kinda like in the book. He's being a major prat I think, but Hermione should bring him around soon. And I did like writing about Snape kinda like a monster. It gave me pleasure to make Ron scared. And Harry's being smart about keeping his secret. With the Tournament coming up, he can't afford to be betrayed by anyone. I'm a little surprised you found the one line foreboding (you weren't supposed to think of it like that yet! ;D ) But things will get crazy here soon, and the last paragraph's important for the next chapter. That's when some things blow up. ^_^ Lots'o angst. But thanks for review and catching some mistakes. This one was written during a really crazy time for me when I had, what felt like, EVERYTHING due at the same time. Thanks again, and I can't wait for your next update!! :D
Author's Response: Yep, Minerva's showing her Gryffindor ferocity. ^_^ And she'll talk to Snape next chappie. Glad you liked it, and thanks for the review!!
Author's Response: They usually do have to be monitored, but he figures that with his potions he'll be alright...plus he's got a hard head. lol MERRY CHRISTMAS to YOU too!!
Author's Response: XD Yeah, that always bothered me that Minerva never really did anything to help Harry out much. In this fic she's tired of all the crap and she's not going to take it anymore! And Harry and Sev will be having a heart-to-heart later on, fear not. And more Dumbles bashing to come! Thanks for the awesome review!! :D
I really don't understand why Albus brought Sirius into the room when it was obvious what would happen, but now he will have to live with that choice and so will the others who witnessed it. Albus has ruined the lives of so many people in his cause, seemingly without caring about the costs to those his choices affect. I hope that Minerva will be able to nip some of his plans in the bud and perhaps keep him at bay when it comes to Harry and Severus' growing relationship. I hope that Harry will be able to get past what has just happened and try to understand that sometimes there is so much bitterness between two individuals that they simply can't ever get along. I do hope that Severus and Sirius will be able to find a way to be civil with each other, if only for Harry's sake, but somehow I doubt it will happen anytime soon. Great chapter! Author's Response: Thanks! Glad to be back! ^_^ And yeah, Dumbles isn't taking into account other people's emotions and thought that he had enough control over Snape that bringing Sirius into the mix wouldn't be too problematic. But since Sev doesn't trust or necessarily like Dumbles anymore, he's not as concerned about upsetting the HM. And Minerva's going to be on high alert from now on. I always thought she should have done a little bit more, but in this story she's sick of standing on the sidelines and watching what the HM's doing. And Harry and Sev will have to have a heart-to-heart soon I think. But thanks for the review and I'm glad you liked it. Have a Merry Christmas too! :D
... Almost. Author's Response: ...almost...maybe...Thanks for the review!
I really hope Severus and Harry feel better in the morning. They could use some time to talk to each other. I noticed you mentioned that only a few people knew where Sev's chambers are, and the list didn't include Harry. Will Severus show him to his private quarters anytime soon? I'm sure Harry would appreciate it, especially since it would be good for him to know how to go to Severus if he needs to. Great chapter, and I'm looking forward to reading about the aftermath. Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked Minerva's little rant to Dumbles. ^_^ She needed to grow some Gryffindor back bone. And yeah, Harry doesn't know where Sev's chambers are YET. They basically just got to the school, and things have been rather crazy. So...yeah. Glad you liked the chapter! Next chaper should be up sooner than it took me to post this one. :D Looking forward to your update! |
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