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Reviews For Where Once Was Light
Author's Response: Thanks! I always like a little glimpse in the past (that's probably why I'm going to be a history teacher) but I thought it would make the read more interesting. Thanks again!
I felt so sorry for Harry at the beginning when he felt badly for Petunia's tears, but also hurt and angry because he knew that she wouldn't have been so upset for him. This is really intriguing! Author's Response: Yay! Glad you're enjoying it! Thanks again for the review!!
Author's Response: Just keep reading. But I'm excited that you like the story so far!
And I loved his thoughts about Number 4 Privet Drive. Author's Response: lol Yeah, I never thought Snape and Privet Drive would get on so much! Thanks for the review!!
Great beginning! Author's Response: Thank you! That means a lot!!
Author's Response: Don't worry about that too much. I've got plans for everything. Glad you liked it! Thanks for the review!!!
I loved it. I felt a warm fuzzy glow all over that Snape would defend Harry like that. Best chapter yet!!! I loved how Snape remained cold and aloof but not with Harry, and that he didn't blame Harry in any way, nor did he make Harry feel that because he did not confide in Dumbledore, that he deserved what he got. Author's Response: Aww! Thanks Pandora!! I'm glad you liked it! This chapter was written to 'de-stress' me after yesterday, so I'm super excited you liked it! I hope I don't disappoint in the future! Thank you, thank you!!
Author's Response: Thanks!!
Dancingkatz Author's Response: Aww! Thank ya kindly!
Oh dear. Watch it, Vernon! Nice cover, Severus, for blaming his weight for breaking the chairleg...*snort* And I'm with him on that question: Why did Petunia marry Vernon? I do not blame him for toying with Vernon's brain in the beginning. I would so do it too! Aww, Harry wakes up to think that Severus abandoned him there. Poor Harry. I lik ehow you connected to canon here by having Harry think that Severus is a coward. Good job, you! To me this bit of dialogue does not make sense without something from Harry to cause Severus to say the following: "“You are not,” it was not a question. “Let me see.”" May I suggest that Harry, after springing back up from his chair, mumble under his breath moreso to himself than for Severus, "I'm alright/fine..." Because a statement claiming his own well-being would then be contradicted by Severus saying that he is not well. Just a thought...Take it or leave it. There just seemed to be no reason for Severus' statement there. Oh dear, sweet Merlin! Vernon has majorly ticked off Severus! Typo Alerts: "He did not want to discuses what he had done last night or any other night." Should be "discuss." It is usually phrased "with his gaze" in this sentence: "...the wizard had learned intimidated people, Severus pinned Vernon in his gaze." Two of them in this one: "His lips twitched as he fought down another grin as he hear his brother-in-law’s frantic scrapping about." Change "hear" to "heard" and "scrapping" to "scraping." In this sentence, "Quickly appearating back into his and Lily’s room,..." it should be spelled "apparating." Here, "The moment he was within arm reach, Snape stood up and cupped Harry’s face in his cool hands..." you need to add an apostrophe to "arm" for "arm's." Next one: "Glaring back, least he start to cry in front of the man, Harry..." Change "least" to "lest." Here: "Crying, Vernon gave a started cry of pain before he looked up..." Either remove "crying" or change "cry" to "shout," and also change "started" to "startled." Author's Response: That's okay, at least you caught up! :) I've had a VERY stressful time yesterday too with really bad storms and all. Lost power all day. But I hope things calm down for you. And Thanks once more for the lovely review!!! |
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