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Reviews For Alea Iacta Est
Author's Response: The key word in what you said is connection... Which connection to Voldemort? We'll find out in the next chapter with Severus. ;)
First of all, I loved the pace of this chapter. I’ve always enjoyed your chapters, but I like how this one was a bit more fast-paced than the others. Yet, “Pain” did not seem rushed and was full of detail, something that can definitely get lost when someone speeds up a chapter. Your’s was perfect though. LOL Harry would get a long right nice with my mom, whenever she gets really nervous, she goes on a cleaning/ moving things different spree…in High School I finally got her to stop reaggranging my room when I wasn’t home…something about not having my glasses on and going to flop on my bed…and hit the floor since she moved it….lol anyway I disgress…. “"How can you say that?" Harry jumped up and away from Severus. He stumbled, but grabbed onto the table before he fell. "You aren't the one about to get a huge needle stuck in your spine!"” OHHHHH I felt so bad for Harry at that moment, scared to death of the procedure, scared to trust. "I could be paralyzed?" His child sunk into the chair, one hand tugging at his hair. A large patch of hair fell out of Harry's hands and onto the table. Harry froze, his eyes fixated on the raven locks. "Harry," Severus whispered as he approached his son from behind. "Look at me, child." Harry twisted in the chair to look up at him. A look of disbelief was plastered onto his face. "You pulled too hard," Severus lied. They both knew it was the start of Harry's hair falling out. He'd been expecting it and mentally prepared himself for it, but Harry looked beyond shocked. "Let's go."” Well, you definitely pulled my heartstrings there. Poor Harry realizing that if the procedure was done wrong he could end up paralyzed (though I think that’s my department!) to only discover that the chemo was making him lose his hair. I hope he shaves it or something, make him feel a tiny bit of power in deciding when his hair would be gone. Then again, I hope he opts not to get his head shaved for more drama…lol I know I’m contradicting myself, I guess I’m on the fence shall I say. And what a day for him to start losing it, right before something he’s (rightfully!) scared to death about. “After Harry almost tripped on a stair despite leaning against Severus, the Potions Master had scooped his child into his arms and carried him with Harry protesting the entire way until they were right outside the Hospital Wing's doors.” Aww Severus is keeping his promise from earlier about carrying him, if I could draw well, I’d draw this scene…maybe I’ll give it a whirl…who knows. "I want it over now," Harry whined. He didn't care if he sounded like a spoilt brat. He hated feeling confined. It reminded him of all the times the Dursleys locked him in the cupboard and later in Dudley's second bedroom.” Aww Harry thinks he’s a brat but no, it’s a perfectly reasonable reaction. "I want to go home," Harry said before realizing what slipped out. "I mean to your quarters." Severus' quarters were more like a home than he'd ever had. They were the only place that he had a room that felt like his, and the only place he'd ever fully unpacked. The Dursleys didn't count since the clothes and things they gave him weren't really his, but his cousin's castaways. "It's your home as well, and we'll return home as soon as Miss Adamson lets you," Severus promised. I LOVED THAT PART! Harry’s subconscious is coming around and he will come around fully I think by the end of this. “the Professor's free hand cupped the back of his head, holding it in place.” That must have been so hard for Severus to do, to know his child is hurting and is unable to stop it and must in fact let it go on…poor father and son. “ so intense he struggled to breath. He coughed and gasped, his lungs searching for air. The beeping in the background sped up and a mask was shoved over his nose and mouth. "Breathe, child." Severus' soothing tone broke through his panic, and Harry coughed once more before inhaling the oxygen that streamed through the mask. "That's it.”” WOW. I’ve already said this but wow, poor Severus and Harry, that’s a really scary situation to be in (I have asthma and have had to have an oxygen mask when my inhaler didn’t work before…Severus had to act all calm so Harry would calm but as he proved a moment later with his voice strained, he was probably anything but really calm. "I'm so sorry," Severus whispered as he nodded to Miss Adamson.” Wow…this sentence literally made me cry. First the obvious that he had to ok something that he knew hurt his son deeply even as it helped him and secondly the use of the word “so.” Many people say “I’m Sorry” but it seems to be more powerful with that little two-letter word. Maybe because as powerful as it sounds it also indicates a brokenness. "I hate you." Harry whimpered. Severus had lied to him. He had said it wouldn't be that bad, but the procedure was torturous in Harry's book. "I know." I think Severus also knows that as much as Harry thinks he means it-he doesn’t. And even if there were any doubts, Severus would still be fighting for him. “"It's over, child," Severus whispered, needing the reassurance for himself as well as his son.” Another sentence that had me crying…Once again “brokenness.” "I'm sorry." Severus couldn't apologize enough. The procedure was necessary, and he hated that Harry had to go through it. Furthermore, Severus had learnt his lesson. He'd see to it that the procedures needed, as part of Harry's treatment plan would be done as painlessly as possible. “ I really hope that Harry doesn’t continually hate Severus and think for long that Severus lied to him, Snape really had no idea of knowing how much it would hurt his son. I really hope that Harry does not wake up to find Severus not there and if he does McGongal tell him where Severus is and that he really had wanted to stay. Hum…I’ll answer this on FFNET too, but I think what happened to Harry was similar to what happened earlier, being sent a reminder. SUPERB CHAPTER! Author's Response: I'm so happy you loved this chapter and noticed the pacing change. My writing technique always shifts after a semester with a new professor and this one showed that. LOL about your mom rearranging your room and you hitting the floor where your bed used to be. My mom rearranges the living room all the time and some mornings I come out of my room and have to do a double take to make sure I'm not still dreaming. Harry's subconscious is slowly coming around. I suppose his word filter is a little off too considering all the painkillers he's on. You're totally right about the addition of so to "I'm sorry." That adverb changes the sentence completely. The next chapter is proving to be a little different technique wise so we'll see how it reads when it's finished. Thanks!
Thanks for the update! wonderful chapter--as usual. V. Author's Response: Are you sure Voldemort was there?.... ;)
Author's Response: It's great to hear you love the little details. I agree that they make a story so much more believable. We'll see how straight to the point Albus in the next chapter. Thanks!
I'm glad to see that you've updated again Ella, and can't wait for the next one. Author's Response: You're right to be worried. We'll see what Dumbledore has to say in the next chapter. Severus, for one, is definitely not going to happy. Thanks.
Author's Response: Thanks! A late Merry Christmas to you. I can't imagine my hair falling out, well any more than it normally falls out. My hair is super long and thick so small handfuls are normal after washing it. Harry will definitely have a choice to make coming up, and we'll have to wait and see what he chooses. Kudos to you for shaving your hair off from the start. |
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