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Reviews For Alea Iacta Est
ah! so exciting! i love the way you portray the teachers and madame pomfrey of course! Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you're enjoying the story.
Can't wait to see what's wrong with Harry. Eagerly reading more! Author's Response: Severus' character is starting to change so while it might seem out of character for canon, I hope it won't put you off. Thanks!
Author's Response: Yeah, it was a pretty scary moment for Harry, though it would be worse if Poppy did the IV as you see later in the story that she's not very good with needles. Thanks!
Author's Response: I see you found the first twist to the story. It won't be the last surprise you'll come by.
Author's Response: It's definitely is a change, but a good one. ;) Sometimes I think the exams to find out what's wrong is worse than anything afterwards because of all the anxiety that goes along with uncertainty.
But other than the ending, I liked the image of Snape as a doctor. I'd like a check up from Snape please! ;D Think you could get me in? lol No, but he's been very good so far, and now Harry's gunna have to depend on him I think. Oh!!! I want Harry to get better! Will Snape invent a potion to help cue him? He's got the time now and all... This was very good and I give your twenty points for the shocker at the end. *phew* (I started to yell at the computer there) And I'm off to read the next chappie! Author's Response: Yay, I surprised you! I think I took everyone by surprise on that one. You'll see how it'll all start to play out as you read further. It definitely won't be Snape inventing a magic potion to cure him. That's the easy way out, and I have no intention of that. Plus this way you get a ton more angst. Snape isn't so much a full doctor, but he has the necessary skills to do many basic things. I always envisioned he'd have some Muggle first aid skills since he survived so long as a spy. It just seems right. Twenty points, wow! Please, don't yell at your computer too much. lol. You wouldn't want to harm it.
Two small quibbles: "Professor Snape is a professional, Harry. He won't let his feelings towards you effect the procedure," ("Effect" should be "affect".) Also, this sentence is grammatically confusing: "Harry just didn't like needles they gave him the creeps." I suspect it is either: "Harry just didn't like needles. They gave him the creeps." or: Harry didn't just 'not like' needles; they gave him the creeps." Those were two spots that I stumbled over when reading... Otherwise, the story is drawing me in! Author's Response: Thanks. I'm glad to hear the story is drawing you in and welcome to my little corner of P&S. Effect vs. affect. Ugh. That's like the one I always get confused, and I tend to be a grammar freak so it drives me crazy. I know that one's a verb and one's a noun, but *sighs* if only Word could be a little bit smarter. It's the second one. Thanks. I read so fast that sometimes little awkward bits like that just don't hit me because by the time my brain processes it, my eyes are taking in the next sentence. I hope you continue on.
I loved this part here: --- "Severus," McGonagall chided. "What if I didn't have his test graded yet?" "I saw it sitting on your desk," Severus answered. --- That made me laugh out loud. ;-) And I am not sure why, but for some reason I like the idea of Snape knowing how and being the one to take Harry's blood. But... Leukemia? Oh. Crud. Next chapter... Author's Response: I love that you're loving certain parts and letting me know what they are. It helps me to know what I'm doing right or if you think that the same parts are cool that I do. I like Snape knowing how to take blood, too. He's super intelligent, and I can see him as a Renaissance man of sorts, interested in many subjects and because of his intellect pursuing them. I'm also glad you got to laugh before you go to the end. It might be the last time for a few chapters. |
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