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Reviews For Alea Iacta Est
Oh, dear, I wish Harry's meeting with Ron and Hermione could have gone better, but it is very understandable how upset he would be to find out that they know about the cancer when he hadn't planned on it. Harry just isn't ready to deal with people knowing it, not because he's ashamed, I think, but because he's terrified. And who can blame him. It is a pretty scary thing. But thank goodness Severus was there for him, and he hugged Harry! Great moment there. I hope everything will go all right tomorrow for Harry. Author's Response: Are you sure Severus just didn't want some sun? lol. ;) He's totally turning into a big softie when it comes to Harry. You're right on with how Harry is feeling. He's terrified and it hasn't fully sunk in so that he just can't deal with others knowing yet. He's overwhelmed, terrified, nervous, just a bunch of things that when mixed together is very hard to deal with, and he needs to feel somewhat in control and that control was swept out from under him when Ron and Hermione already knew. Thanks!
Okay, so poor Harry finds Ron and Hermione know...ouch. >_< I'm not sure I'd like to find out my friends knew I had something before I told them. I like a level playing field...or a playing field where I have the advantage! lol But I would've run away too...but just a thought, where's Harry's 'Gryffindor' courage at the moment? Is it sleeping? Must just be stress from everything. And yay for Snape hugging Harry! ^-^ Very cute, and much needed! But Poppy's not going to have fun any time soon. After Sev's reaction, I'm amazed that she'll like through the rest of the story. >_< Wouldn't wanna be her! AWWW! And Sev let Harry go flying YAY!...or wait, it was JUST because HE wanted to go OUTSIDE to grade. *rolls eyes* sure, Sev, sure. But that was so cute! Ha! Harry basically has Snape wrapped around his finger. Where's the 'big scary Potions Master' now? lol You did well with the emotions in this chapter. I got all nervous in the Great Hall scene. Very good! And you had me grinning stupidly when Harry was flying. I know what you mean about the emotions though- sometimes I don't think I do so well either. Maybe we can take Legilimen classes together? lol Well, I had a LONG day of driving, so I'll read more tomorrow. And thanks for the thanks about 250 reviews (did that make sense???) :D Author's Response: Severus is totally still in denial and of course it would be totally natural for him to want to go outside to grade. *snickers* Poor Harry indeed. I think his Gryffindor courage is in hiding. He's going through a lot and mentally he's a bit unstable at the moment. It's only a matter of time before it's all too much for him... Yay, I'll likely have more reviews from you when I wake up in the morning *cough afternoon cough* Also, you're welcome for the shout-out.
Author's Response: Thanks! Harry is facing a lot in a little time. He's lucky Severus is there for him whether he realizes it or not.
I really like the way you've written Sev and Harry. The change from mutual hatred to caring and trust happens quickly, but it's well done and believable. The cancer diagnosis took me completely by surprise. Harry's analogy of cancer being like his body's version of ol' Moldy Voldy and his minions was very creative, and fitting! Oh, Dumbledore's attitude towards Harry, and the leukemia, is rather disturbing...I know he doesn't know a lot about cancer, but still...I hope he pulls his head out of his posterier soon...Severus taking it upon himself to look at Harry's medical file to figure out what's wrong was...sweet, in a Snape-ish sort of way. And the way he keeps trying to justify what he's doing, how his perception of Harry is changing (but he's trying to deny that it is), is priceless. I especially like this line from this chapter: "Should he just wave the white flag of surrender concerning Harry now and get it over with?" When I read that, I found myself nodding emphatically and saying, "Yes, you might as well go ahead and give it up as a lost cause. We all know you're going soft...at least where Harry's concerned..." *snickers* I don't imagine he's appreciate that comment, but it's true! Random question that isn't even really relevant (I'm just curious): How did Severus get a prescription for Vicodin?! *grins* When I read what the pills were (loved the scene with him searching all over the place for them! Go cats!!), and could help but laugh, which is probably not the reaction you were looking for, but I've watched the TV show "House" too much to not find any reference to Vicodin in stories amusing. (If you don't know what "House" is, let me know, and I'll be glad to tell you all about it!) I was really thrown by Sev's mother, though...well, no, not his mother, but his family in general. It didn't confuse me that his mother has a different name (I like the name "Aurora," by the way), though I found it a tad odd that he called her by her name, instead of "Mother", but considering she's basically a hippie, it doesn't surprise me that it makes her feel old to be called "Mother". Making Tobias Snape and Eileen Prince Sev's aunt and uncle was a nice twist; I rather liked it! All in all, I rather like Aurora Prince. I hope we'll get to see more of her. But, I have a few questions...if you're planning on answering any of them later, then I'll be glad to wait for them to come into the story...Who is Sev's father, and will we get to meet him? Did Tobias have a brother who married Aurora? Or is there another reason why Aurora called Severus "Prince" (I like his middle names, by the way!), but he goes by "Snape"? I am right in assuming that Aurora and Eileen are sisters, aren't I? And speaking of sisters, will we get to meet (or at least find out more about) this mysterious sister that Snape has? It doesn't surprise me at all that Hermione has a Slytherin side, or that she and Ron would be so persistent in finding out what's wrong with Harry. They really do need to calm down, though...Threatening Severus Snape is more likely to get them banned from the dungeons than it is to get them in to see Harry. I like that Harry is seeking Severus for safety (he ran to the dungeons, and his room, but I think it's Snape that he's associating with safety, and he knows that, even if Sev isn't there at that exact moment, he'll always return there). With all that he's going through, and the fact that Snape is helping him so much, and is the only one who hasn't panicked (outwardly) even once, it makes sense that Harry's starting to feel the most safe around him. I really liked the shopping scene...I can see Harry not being comfortable with Snape paying for everything for him, and arguing a bit, but knowing that it was Snape's mother's idea (command, really) makes it a bit harder to argue... So, I was reading this chapter, and got to the part where Harry told Severus that Ron and Hermione know about his cancer, and Sev was shocked and furious, and I thought, "Wait...doesn't he already know that they know?" So, I went back and checked, and found that scene, and read through it, found no mention of leukemia or cancer, and thought, "Huh...guess I remembered wrong...I could have sworn they told Snape they knew about Harry having cancer...." Then I scrolled back up to the top of the chapter, and noticed the note you left about the chaper being revised, and thought, "Oh, good! I my memory's still intact! ...mostly..." I'm glad the continuity error has been fixed, but I'm also glad you left a note about the revision, otherwise I'd be left wondering if I'm loosing what's left of my mind! ;) I think you did a great job with all the emotions and everything. It's nice that Harry got to fly, especially after his near breakdown, but I would have liked to have a snippet from Harry's point of view...maybe you can have him remember back to it, at some point? If it'll fit into the story...Oh, one last thing: I love Flurry! You've got her feline antics down pat! I can only assume that you've owned at least one cat at some point...Though I do have a question...I seem to remember it mentioning somewhere in one of the chapters (I don't remember which one, or I'd go look it up), that Sev has had Flurry for several years, but she's referred to as a kitten...is that another continuity error, or is there a reason that hasn't been explained, yet? *whew* I think I'll try to review after every chapter from now on, so the reviews aren't quite so overwhelming (for you or me)! Thanks for the great story! I'm off to read the next chapter, now! (Oh, and I apologize if my review rambles a bit...that tends to happen when I write, which is why I don't write stories very often). Author's Response: Okay where to begin. LoL. Don't worry, I love long reviews with plenty of speculation. I'm happy to hear you like the way I've written Harry and Sev's relationship and that I took you by surprise. ;) Harry's analogy of cancer came from a light bulb turning on moment when I was revising that chapter. I must say I'm quite proud of it myself. I also love that you're picking out line and telling me which ones you love. It helps me know what you like. As for Sev's Vicodin prescription with his training I'm sure he has a few contacts in the medical field Muggle and wizarding that he was able to get the prescription from. Since I'm also a "House" watcher, I totally get when you'd be amused with Vicodin. Did you know there's a short story out there that's a crossover with Sev ending up as House's patient? It was very amusing. The mystery around Sev's family will have to wait a bit, but I promise you'll get your answers eventually. Good speculation, but we'll see how much of it is accurate later. Rest assured, we'll get to meet Snape's mysterious sister eventually also. Ron and Hermione really do need to calm down, but they're acting pretty much like typical teenagers. I'm glad you picked up on why Harry is feeling so safe around Severus, though I'm not sure Harry realizes it quite yet. The shopping scene was fun to right after I sorta figured out the British clothing sizes. Yes, it being Aurora's command did make it harder to argue and saved each of them some breath. You're not crazy! Yay! I totally thought I had written the end of chapter ten to be ambiguous. I have no idea what I was thinking. As for Harry's POV during flying, as a writer I hate writing like a paragraph or two in one person's POV before switching, but I might have Harry reference that flight later on. We'll see where Harry takes me. Flurry is one awesome cat, isn't she? Yes, I do own a cat, a very psychotic one named Roxie that turns pens, bottle caps, balled up paper, etc into toys on a regular basis only for them to be batted under a piece of furniture until Mom decides to rearrange and then it's like finding a treasure trove.
Author's Response: Thanks! That chapter was a test of sorts before writing Harry's breakdown so I'm glad you liked it.
Author's Response: Thank you! I thought it was only appropriate Harry got to fly one last time. The next chapter is about 2/3rds done, I think. It was going to include the Hickman procedure, but Harry, Sev, and Flurry had other ideas, but I think you guys will like the next one a lot. =)
low 65 congrats! I wish it would get warm here we need to trade its cloudy and cold but i have to keep the window open because my grandmother loves perfume and I HATE it so must let the smell out...how much longer will it linger T_T I'm freezing here! LOL well can't wait for more! *smirks* hehe I knew I wouldn't like Hermonie and Ron in this chapter muahaahaha *coughs* erm you didn't hear that lol Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked all the details. Wouldn't sending visions be awesome? I'll trade you weather though I bet within a week you'll want to switch back. We just don't have heat, we have like super high humidity. I totally heard that concerning Hermione and Ron, but I won't hold it against you. There's always characters people don't like, and well I don't think I liked them either in this chapter.
This was good. And as I seem to do in every fic that I read, I am finding Ron and Hermione to be annoying. But like I said, I seem to do that in most fics. ;-) Harry seems to be getting very close to Snape, and fast. I wonder if he even realizes it. His dependency is growing and I suppose later on we will really see how much. I think ya got the emotions right. I wanted to hug Harry, but since Snape was already doing that, it was okay that I couldn't. :D Snape already knew what Madam Pomfrey did, so why was he so angry now? His reaction just didn't seem to make much sense to me there. But I love how Harry got to go flying. And I don't know abut him, but I will personally be glad when the castle empties out. ;-) So I suppose he'll get his Hickman line the next chapter. That should prove to be... interesting. I'm still enjoying this and looking forward to the next chapter! Author's Response: Ron and Hermione can be quite annoying, can't they? I seem to find them annoying in most fics, too. I don't think Harry realizes how close he's getting to Snape. I think that if anyone made the effort to do as Sev is in caring for Harry, they'd be quickly rewarded because in a way Harry is starved of affection from an adult. He has all these basic needs that he doesn't realize he's missing out on and that subconsciously he's waiting for. Aww, you can hug Harry after Sev is done. I'm happy to hear I got the emotions right. Harry's happy he got to go flying, too and is with you on the castle emptying out. As for the consistency error, *calls in the consistency fairy* I totally somehow thought I left the end of chapter 10 more ambiguous. I can't believe I did that, but I should have the end of chapter 10 fixed so that error is rectified in a few hours as I think the reveal works better in chapter 12. I also hope to start working on chapter 13 later today so we'll see how fast I get it written.
You just write so beautifully, and I can't wait for the next chapter. Author's Response: Thanks! I love that you think I write so beautifully. It's awesome to hear. Chapter 13 is proving to be a highly anticipated one so let's hope I get it written fast. |
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