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Reviews For Alea Iacta Est
One thing though is that you continue to switch between calling the Specialist "Miss Adamson" and "Miss Lucy". It is very jarring to read. I would suggest that you stick to one name during narration, unless it is from a character's POV who calls her such. Anyhow, good job! Author's Response: Thanks. Snape has no choice, but to be patient. He knows Harry's very sick and has to make allowances for that. As for the Miss Lucky vs. Miss Adamson thing, that part is from Harry's POV although it wasn't as intimate POV compared to the last chapter. It might've gotten lost a little since there were many things to describe, but thanks for letting me know. I'll try to work on that.
Author's Response: Thanks! I plan to spend much of the day tomorrow writing, so hopefully I'll get that the next chapter out sooner than this one.
Author's Response: ;) Thanks!
Author's Response: Ups and downs is right. Harry's starting to get a taste of what his life will be like for a while. Thanks!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm happy to hear that you like the light moments mixed in with the emotional stuff. It can't be depressing and emotional the whole time, or otherwise it would emotionally wear you guys out.
Precautions? List after list of do's and don'ts that will attempt to keep him as healthy as possible through this procedure. Food, cleanliness, meds, etc. Poor boy and Poor Sev. I'm glad he has Sev though, He'll need him. V. Author's Response: He is burnt out emotionally at the moment. As for the precautions, you're right to a point, but you only took into account the second part of the next chapter's title... Thanks! |
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