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Reviews For Sacrifices
Author's Response: Well, no pun intended it is a witchhunt at this point in time. And anyone who's even whispered to have been associated with the Death Eaters is guilty by association. Flitwick is massively important to this story. Read on for more of why. Thank you for reviewing! Hope to hear from you again! ~ RK
Author's Response: Again, not sure if this is good or bad, but thank you for leaving a review. ~ RK
Author's Response: Thank you! I find it strange how in canon Sirius had no trial, yet someone like Karkaroff would. Maybe it's because there were "witnesses" to Sirius's crime? I'm not sure. Glad that you like Remus's involvement here. He'll be around a lot more in the story. Thank you again!
Second, cheers for this exciting, dramatic chapter. Well done! Author's Response: You're welcome for the long response. I thought your review needed a long one, being so helpful and thought out. Thanks for this new review! Very excited about it. I'm looking forward to more of your comments in the future. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
I'm sorry that I didn't read this sooner. It 's very well written, but at least I get to read several chapters at once! :) Author's Response: Yeppers! (Hello, again! *grin*) Thanks for the compliments, I'm so excited!
My second one is a smaller criticism really, but when you described one of the Slytherins talking who called Snape a traitor, you called her 'Millicent.' Of course, that could be a very popular name in the Hogwarts world, but the first thing that popped into my mind was 'Millicent Bulstrode,' who is in the same class as Harry Potter. I was confused for a little bit because if that were the case, it would be a plot error, but I'm not sure you meant it that way. Personally, I think that section would be better if you just called her a random student, since we really aren't familiar with any students at Hogwarts during this time period. I hope you don't let my criticisms get you down though. I wouldn't have taken the time to voice my concerns if I didn't really like this story, nor would I have read all five chapters just to tell you it was subpar. I think this story is extraordinary and I'm hoping you will update soon because I really want to know what happens to poor Severus and Harry, as well as the story behind Severus being Harry's father. My favorite part of this chapter was when Harry grabs Sev's wand and turns his curtains "purpur." Very cute and you are showing that Harry already has the propensity for magic at a young age. Ooooh, please update soon! I can't wait to read more! -P.G. Author's Response: Well, to your first point about the arrival. THe reason why he chose that point as well, which maybe I should add a blurb in there...*thinks...* is because Severus knows that the staff and student body would be at dinner - including Dumbledore - so he is not worried about running into him as he gets to his chambers. *thinks, again...I may have to include that statement somewhere...* But thank you for making me aware of that. And about Millicent Bagnold. (This is not a student, but the Minister for Magic who pronounced Snape a traitor...I'll check that, and see if it might be fixed or made clearer...) According to a few reference pages on the Harry Potter universe, she was the Minister for Magic from 1980-1990. (My information comes from Harry Potter Wiki.) Even when I found that out, I was even nervous that she would be confused with Millicent Bulstrode, as you pointed out. But Millicent Bagnold is a canon character, and I decided that she needed to be used here. Sorry for the confusion...but...I'm trying to stick as much canon in this as possible without it being canon...But, point well noticed and taken! Ten points for the criticism, I welcome/encourage it. Glad you thought Harry turning the curtains purple was cute, I liked writing that little moment. And yes,it was to show that he is skilled at his young age. Glad you caught that! Thanks for reviewing/reading!
I'm glad Remus could help. PS. I think maybe some purple pillows or something could accent the room. A nice jewel tone purple perhaps. Author's Response: Yes, it does "sucketh mightily," as you say. *giggles at your purple coments there...* Perhaps...
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad to see you are still reading.
I literaly laughed out loud with the whole, "No child of mine will sleep in a purple bed." That was great. And I also liked when Harry wanted the bear! So sad!! And the Minister's not Fudge? What an unexpected pleasure...or is it? I'm so glad that the Slytherin were sticking up for Sev. That made me happy. They should all try to stick together, especially after what just happened. Fantastic! But for once, I caught a little something in your story. Don't freak out! Just a little mistake. In the second section, you called Flitwick the Head of Hufflepuff. It should be Ravenclaw. But that's just about it. Least I could do after all you do for me, anyway! :) Love the story, and I'll try to keep up! Author's Response: OH my dear! *head wall* I said Flitwick was Head of Hufflepuff!? *head wall...hard!* Wow... And as to Fudge not being the Minister. If my research was correct. At this point, Fudge was the (I believe it was) Junior Minister in the Department of Magical Accidents and Catastrophes in 1981, so therefore he was not the Minister for Magic. He becomes the Minister for Magic in 1990. And Millicent Bagnold was the Minister from 1980-1990, according to canon and Harry Potter Wiki...Glad you liked the Slytherins sticking up for Severus in the chapter, and was amused by the purple bed. Thanks for reading, and also catching my mistakes. *grin* Will fix... |
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