interesting start! keep going please. :)
have you found your grammar-conscious beta yet? I'd be willing to offer my own nit-picky services should you need them. :-)
Author's Response: I'm still lonely and beta-less *hearts cckeimig* Leave me your email/msn/jabber/whatever in a PM?
Hiya!! I'm not willing to beta, unfortunately (my own story takes up too much of my free time as it is!) but I can help on one point of English - 'inky' means very, very, dark. As such, an 'inky Christmas evening' turning into a 'dark night' doesn't make much sense. It sounds almost like the night is lightening up, which of course is not the case.
That said, I like the chapter. The conversation between Sev and Minerva is interesting.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review. *thinks* I hear your reasoning, but I still think I said what I wanted to say: that they are equivalent.
You did very well! And English is not your first language. Nice beginning. I'm intrigued to know where this is going to lead.
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