It’s nice to see them falling into a familial pattern. So much better than Harry’s life would’ve been at #4.
| Title: Accidental Magic
| 09 May 2015 7:33 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Love the domestic scenes thank you
Great story so far, I'm going to read until the last chapter today ;-)
But I notice in this chapter an inconsistency :
"All was quiet in the dungeons, for it was summer and the students had all returned home"...
...and in the morning they're late for classes and school ??
This looks to be a fun story, but it's hurt by your malapropisms.
“That defiantly doesn't sound like fun.”
You mean "definitely," and you made the same mistake consistently in this chapter. Granted, I can mentally sub in the right word, but it throws one out of the story.
Well, Harry is supposed to be a strong wizard and so it'd be natural for him to have accidental magic that was strong too. I like how Bella and Sev are raising him. And the part with Harry's stomachache and them all oversleeping was so sweet!
Author's Response: I'm glad you thought it was sweet. Thanks for your reveiw!
| Title: Accidental Magic
| 15 Aug 2009 9:17 pm
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| Reviewer: toast (Anonymous)
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that was fantastic!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it. Thanks for your review!
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