good story, but to be honest all the relationships got a bit to much, I understand you wanted everyone to have a happy ending, but by the end it all seemed so Disney like. but still it was a good effort.
Author's Response: Well, I'm a sucker for happy endings. You won't find a story of mine where most characters don't end well. It's just me, I love the angst through the story but in the end I like the hope that a story leaves you if after everything they've gone through they end well. In my opinion life gives you enough crappie endings, and I both read and write to escape those crappy endings. To find that yes, when people do bad things they do get punished and when they're decent human beings they get good things (which usually doesn't real life. My experience is that the poor suckers that try to be decent get the worst and the bastards that step on everyone get away with anything), So here I get to pretend that there could maybe be a chance that things could have a fair ending. Unrealistic, yes. But, *shrugs* who cares?? Not me! He,he.
Anyway, I'm happy you had fun! I hope you enjoy any other story of mine that you read and thank you so much for the feedback!