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Reviews For Just a father
Title: Why not? 03 Oct 2009 6:56 am
Reviewer: JAWorley (Signed) [Report This]
    Some grammar and spelling mistakes, but otherwise good. The only other thing that really bothers me is that you constantly use the word "for" instead of "because." Also you use ' around speaking instead of " Just some thoughts to help.

    Author's Response:

    JAWorley,

    Yeah, well I don't have a spellchecker on the program I use and such. I do the best I can but thanks for letting me know that I still have a few things to fix up, will get around to them asap. I don't use "because" often although I am not sure why. But "for" also serves the same purpose. There is no inacuracy about using ' marks instead of " for speaking. Also many books/novels have been known to use these marks and I prefer to use them. Thanks for your thoughts and observations though for I am always trying to improve. Will update soon.

    -Mel :)

Title: Why not? 02 Oct 2009 9:50 pm
Reviewer: Dramagirl007 (Signed) [Report This]
    This chapter was very good. Keep up the good work and please update ASAP. :)

    Author's Response:

    Dramagirl007,

    Thank-you, I'm glad you thought. I will, thanks and I'm updaing in just a moment.

    -Mel :)

Title: Why not? 30 Sep 2009 6:24 am
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, very nice. I really like how the "why not" was never really answered. I also like how you've conveyed Snape's emotions about how he doesn't think he could have a relationship like what Harry wants because it's never worked in the past. He hasn't really been close with anyone for the longest time and so this will be really hard for him. I hope he makes the potion though; with time, I'm sure all of those things would sort themselves out.

    Nice work!

    -P.G.

    Author's Response:

    P.G,

    Thank-you! Yeah it wasn't really a question but more like two innocent words leading to more questions. You're spot on about Snape and how hard this will be for him. You know what they say; "Everything is okay in the end. If it's not okay than it's not the end" so yeah, I'm sure they'll be able to work things out eventually...bit by bit with time. Thanks, and will update soon!

    -Mel :)

Title: Why not? 29 Sep 2009 9:56 am
Reviewer: jessirose85 (Signed) [Report This]
    Great work

    Author's Response:

    Jessirose85,

    Thanks!

    -Mel :)

Title: Why not? 29 Sep 2009 2:32 am
Reviewer: Fairner (Signed) [Report This]
    Why not, two innocent little words. Or I think they are, usually when I imagine someone asking why not, it's a child being curious...but now that I think about it, it also could be a annoyed why not let me do this lol! But for Harry and Severus I'll stick to my first thought.
    Ah bother, bother here came complicated--Ol' Moldy Shorts! XD

    Author's Response:

    Fairner,

    Yes, two single words that are seemingly so innocent. I think it's more along the lines of both of your thoughts: a child being curious but also annoyed that he cannot do something he wants to. Although yes, it's mostly the first option in their case :P. Hehe. Yeah, more complications indeed.

    -Mel :)

Title: Why not? 28 Sep 2009 8:16 am
Reviewer: Ivy-Green (Signed) [Report This]
    When I wanted to go on, I realized that I could not go on this time. :( But this was very good. Come on Sev, just take the plunge!! Everyone knows he wantes to be a dad! And poor Harry, doesn't know what to make of Snape's words. Poor kid...but I really liked this and I look forward to your update! :D

    Author's Response:

    Ivy-green,

    Heh, yeah but I will be updating soon so fret not :P. Thank-you for each of your reviews! Severus wants to take the plunge but you know know what he's like! They're both not used to getting happiness for themselves and are unsure, confused and a whole lotter other things but they'll get there ;). Although you're right, Sev does want to be a dad heh. Cute, in my option. I'm pleased to hear it and as I said: will update soon!

    -Mel :)

Title: Why not? 28 Sep 2009 8:08 am
Reviewer: mithrilandtj (Signed) [Report This]
    Poor Snape. So confused. He should just make that potion and Go For IT!

    Author's Response:

    Mithrilandtj,

    Yeah I agree with you there! If only it were that simple for him.

    -Mel :)

Title: Why not? 28 Sep 2009 6:56 am
Reviewer: Question (Anonymous) [Report This]
    how come the chapter words are all in bold?

    Author's Response:

    Question,

    This wasn't something I did. It was just an annoying thing that occurs sometimes when I update, sorry. I fixed it now though :P.

    -Mel :)

Title: Why not? 27 Sep 2009 8:27 pm
Reviewer: Allywhatsits (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Please run spell-check before posting, or proof-read your chapters better.

    Author's Response:

    Allywhatsits,

    There is no spell-check...is there? I do proof-read my chapters, but is it really that bad? I only noticed a few errors after further inspection...thanks for letting me know though.

    -Mel :)

Title: Why not? 27 Sep 2009 7:37 pm
Reviewer: S.S (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Brilliant chapter can't wait for more could you please not bold the writing I have really bad eyesight no joke it's terrible

    Author's Response:

    S.S,

    Thanks, glad to hear it! I'm sorry about the bold but I actually didn't do that. It happens sometimes when I update and trust me, I hate it too!! I will fix it asap. Thanks.

    -Mel :)


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