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Reviews For Just a father
Author's Response: Jessirose85, Thanks. -Mel :)
A few things though: You've had Snape explain three times that he was Lily's friend, this seems rather odd as I think Harry would have picked up on it the first time. How did Harry know that Snape used to be a DE? It's only in book 4 that Harry gets to know about DE(and everything first war Voldemort related) at all. How could Harry visit Ron when Ron was supposed to be on vacation(which was why Harry couldn't visit them for Christmas)? Whatever happened to the duelling club and the basilisk? And Dobby? Where does this story diverge from cannon? Author's Response: Ichihime, Thanks for your review :). And to clear those things up: I intended for Snape to explain that he was Lily's friend more times than required. Mostly the man isn't aware of the count, but also because he wants to make sure Harry knows that, even though you're right...surely Harry isn't as dense not to notice that by now. That time he told him, Harry was checking facts and feeling unsure, but Snape took the chance to remind him anyway. This will be further explained later. Yes, I noticed that I forgot to mention that Harry does know about Death Eaters. It's from reading and asking Hermione a few questions that resulted in this knowledge. I needed him to know about them obviously, but I hadn't realized that I hadn't made that clear to the readers. Ron is on vacation, but floo's home for the actual Christmas day and an odd day here or there so that the family can be home for at least some section of it. I am going to make sure I keep an eye on such details, thank you for pointing them out because I understand now that while it's obvious to me, I tend to make sure my readers are aware of it as well. And while this story is set in second year, the actual "Chamber of Secrets" plot does not apply, therefore no Dobby, Basilisk, Petrified victims, Riddle's book, Heroic slides down dark tunnels etc. -Mel :)
Author's Response: Dramagirl007, Yeah is has, sorry about that. Glad to hear it was worth it though, and yeah those two are working things out and getting on track again. Thank-you and I will! -Mel :)
Author's Response: Justjoanjm, Thanks, glad to hear it. -Mel :)
Author's Response: Projectjay, Yeah, I agree. And he's gonna get some thigns he needs, soon. -Mel :)
Author's Response: Pandora, Yay, that was part of my intent. Yeah nice little moments and bonding, which will only increase with time. Thanks for the review. -Mel :)
-P.G. Author's Response: PG, Yeah sorry about that. But at least you got your wish now! -Mel :)
Author's Response: Vampire Skye, Thanks! And yes, I am really proud of my fic. I will. -Mel :)
Ooh, and now he's annoying on purpose! There is some Slytherin in the boy after all! I can so see Snape saying, "Well, be bored indoors!" *giggles* Oh, and now he's trying to be James. He's being very clever about this. Oh, no! He remembered that he left the book open! Oh, the boys need to talk about this! I feel bad for Harry, I do, but they both need this bond, not just Harry. I'm glad Snape decided to just do it and try to talk about it though. Oh, poor Snape thinkingn it wasn't meant to last. Oh man...Good job! I hope you're happy! I'm getting emotional! Harry screaming that he hated him! UGH! Oh, poor Snape. And poor Harry! He knew just what horrible things to say, too! The only good thing about this situation, is that Snape knows what caused the reaction in Harry. This must be fixed! Somehow! Author's Response: Raven Knight, Yeah, indeed. I am thrilled that you agree and approve of Harry's reaction because to me I can't see him realistically reacting any other way. And yes, there is quite some Slytherin in the boy hehe. He has figured out that what Snape hates most about him is the James aspect and so he is using that to try and distance them. Snape is determined to fix things, he will sooner realize that the boy needs this bond with him before he realizes that he needs it as well. Snape is as unsure and insecure as Harry in terms of their future. Both are not used to being granted such happiness or a family that actually cares about them. I wanted it to have the emotional effect, glad it did even though it was terrible for the boys. Yes, it will need some fixing and Snape isn't going to let this go so easily! Thanks for the review!! -Mel :)
(IMHO the part with acsidental overhearing of Harry's words was not nesessary, but that's only my opinion. Thank you for the story, it's special for me) Can't wait to see next part, sure (almost ) Snape's got right idea.) Author's Response: Wyrsa, Thanks, glad to hear it as I was aiming for that. The part with the accdiental overhearing of Harry's words were necessary, just maybe not yet ;). I'm happy to hear you feel that way about the fic. I thank you for the review! Snape's getting there, but he still has some learning and adjusting to do. Harry too. -Mel :) |
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