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Title: Chapter 8 18 Nov 2009 3:38 pm
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    It's awfully hypocritical of Umbridge to not punish Ron for calling her names when she's trying so hard to reign in her class, particularly Harry. I hope they find something wrong with him at the infirmary so he doesn't have to go to detention tonight.

    -P.G.

    Author's Response:

    Hey, yeah I suppose it is but then she has got her eye firmly on Harry, she really couldnt have cared less about Ron who holds no political sway whatsoever.  Heh, ah, but what if he wants to go?  (well, no wants... oh, you'll see ^-^)

    have fun x

Title: Chapter 9 18 Nov 2009 2:10 pm
Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]
    Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]

    Hiya Lisa! Thanks for the mention in you end notes. I too enjoyed our game of cyber tennis and hope to do it again. LOL. I am actually surprised that you had the energy to upload this chapter at all, considering the foul heatwave you have been enduring. I see your fire alerts border on catastrophic! We too are on total fire bans and conditions tomorrow are also going to have the potential for catastrophe. Do you ever get the feeling that our continent is dying? I do. What a doomsayer am I? Sorry to be so cheerful, LOL.

    Onto my review: I am so pleased that Harry went to the hospital wing, but less than satisfied with the treatment he got there. Poppy knows Harry's history and she knows how stalwart and uncomplaining he is. We read all of her ruminations, we know that she knows all these things about Harry, and yet she just waves her wand over him and when she doesn't get a satisfactroy answer, and when he vomits, she doesn't investigate further.

    WHY DIDN'T SHE GET HIM TO UNDRESS? As a nurse, I find this unforgivable. The first part of any treatment is observation. She can see how ill he is, but she just lets it go! I am so frustrated! Her wand waving told her that Harry was seriouly ill but she ascertained that he did not have the flu. She did not delve any further. Poppy needs to rely on her eyes rather than solely on her wand. Umbridge might have made it that Harry's ill-health cannot be diagnosed magically, but I am sure any potion would not make it that Poppy cannot SEE the problem. Or has thaT POTION MADE THE WOUNDS INVISIBLE? And she let him escape in the ensuing melee. At the very least, she should have gone after him when all settled down.

    I suppose I am thinking exactly as we foolish Muggle nurses think. LOL.
    Obviously wands leave a lot to be desired when it comes to diagnosing a problem.

    Dumbledore has been predictably vague and unhelpful. Don't know why he bothered speaking to Ron And Hermione. He certainly didn't listen to them and had nothing to tell them besides his normal riddle-speak that Ron didn't even understand!

    Love the letter they wrote to Sirius and can't wait to see whether it bears fruit. And yes, I think he should be made accountable for those horrible words he spoke to Harry. I would've liked to see Ron's anger boil over a little more and him tell Sirius exactly what a wanker he is. He nearly got there.

    But if I know Sirius, he will make the whole thing Snape's fault because Ron mentioned him in a negative light in the letter. But I have only just thought...how is this letter going to get through Umbitch's screening process. I know Sirius's name is not mentioned, nor Padfoot, nor Snuffles. But as Ron and Hermione have signed the letter, Umbitch will know they are talking about Harry. Who else, after all?

    In your authors notes, you said that some things are unknowingly uncovered. Once again, my lack of brainpower is showing. I cannot see what has been uncovered. We know Harry is sick but the reason why hasn't been discovered. Ron and Hermione are no further in the know and have only managed to be become frustrated by DD.

    Needless to say, I am hanging out for chapter 10. I mean... by my fingertips.

    Lesley~

    Author's Response:

    Wow I love your reviews! ^^

    Hehe tennis, anytime ^-^ it was really fun and really, it got me writing because I was considering what you'd said so thank you!  And you're not wrong, the heatwave is extremely disgusting (43 degrees in spring should be illegal or something TT) so editing and uploading a chapter was about all I did have the energy to do ^^ and we've reached catastrophic for at least today (yay us, we win! ^-^) you just know there's gonna be some stupid arsonist out there who thinks today should be a good one to prove a point, so kind of on tenterhooks right now, although we're not in as much danger last year since we moved from the country so that should at least be better ^^ hope you keep safe (and freezing freezing cold ^^) too, especially if you're also at risk.  I do get the impression Australia was never meant to be populated lol, but we survive year after year so I suppose it could be worse (and be as cheerful as you like, cynicism is so much fun ^-^... and hey, we'll all end up nice and tanned... or shrivelled and crispy... and who doesnt want that?^^

    I so love your reviews, as soon as I saw it I squealed (think I deafened myself ^^) Hmm, Harry.  As halfhearted as it was, he was finally reaching out (although I think it was one of those situations where he'd just had enough and didnt care who knew anymore... he's kinda left with a second wind though so the next few chapters should be interesting ^^... I'm so mean) and I fully suggest filling out a complaint form when it comes to Poppy ^^ if he'd only gone complaining of a general 'not feeling well' should she really have stripped him? (that came out wrong but you know what I meant ^-^)  But you make a very good point when you put it that way, she really should have done a little more... uh, investigating, especially considering his reluctance at the best of times... that's half oversight on my part (I think I played it up too much... whoopsy ^^ have a habit of that... especially considering chapter 6 ^^) and half Poppy - I wanted to show how she's helpless to do more than what students let her, just as much as she's helpless to do anything about abuse beyond talking to Dumbles. 

    Considering that by the time they get to Hogwarts they're eleven and by then it's a case of having to be able to say what's wrong or suck it up (not something I like but something that just kinda happens - but then my school sucked and that's the experience I'm going on ^^) there isnt much more Poppy could have done... at the very least though she was very concerned if that endears her at all to you? She hovered like the proverbial bumblebee for hours ^-^ (too bad Harry was too zonked out to notice, might've made him more talkative ^^)   Oh and she didnt let him go - believe me, he's gonna hear about that the next time he sees her... and is conscious... ^-^ no, she will not be impressed.  And I didnt know you were a nurse ^^, no wonder you werent thrilled with Poppy's treatment!  Believe me, I'm anything but and my writing of one may suck... a lot (sorry ^-^)

    Dont worry, she'll be more invasive next time round ^-^  And... well... she's very busy... *coughcrapcough* hehe nah, she just got caught up in the ton of students in her infirmary (I have half a mind to write that several were struck by Hooch's waving hands and needed healing as well ^-^).  It'll only be a matter of days until he's back there... in between if it helps, she's keeping very busy... she's not a bad woman, just flustered and overworked, I cant imagine working an entire school on my own, poor woman (would have to be demoralising as well to have a boss like Dmubles who doesnt always have the child as the first priority.)

    and who knows what some potions can do... ^^

    Hehe, hmm, perhaps someone should develop a more efficient magic diagnoser... then again I bet it would make life easier for you if you could wave a wand and know what was wrong (as long as they didnt have any curse scars I suppose ^^)

    I think Dumbledore was trying just as much to glean info from them as they were from him, and I think even a wizarding quote would have gone over Ron's head (he's gorgeous and all but he's not one for reading subtleties in language ^^)   Unfortunately since Harry wont talk to anyone there isnt any info to glean.  Not to mention, it was a good annoyance to push Ron into writing to Sirius ^-^

    Hehe, I know, so close!  Dont worry, Ron will get his chance to let loose on Sirius soon too (I've given myself so many little loose ends... damn ^-^ - hopefully it will make for a better story to read but to write it's gonna be hard ^-^)  And just think, if Ron had let loose on Sirius in a letter, would he really want to see them or would it get his back up?  Although it would have been so much fun to see Ron channel Gordon Ramsey ^-^

    lol, I think Sirius would make everything Snape's fault even if he hadnt been mentioned ^^ And at last! Something I considered ahead of time! lol - Dont worry, Ron will get around the toad's screening process, that last line helped set up chapter 11 ^^

    Hehe dont worry, that was what I was aiming for (that things would be uncovered but you wouldnt know it ^-^  I'm mean ^^) - ah perfect, you know just enough to be asking the right questions (and be annoyedb y the right people lol), I hope I'm not irritating you too much, especially when your helping me so much (it's invaluable to know where readers are at, thank you!) - Dont worry, we're reaching a climactic part (though not the end of the fic ^^) and the next few chapters should more relatively fast I think ^^

    Hehe, well make sure you give the fingertips a break, especially in this heat - you may want to pause your hanging out to grab some water ^-^ *drowns you in muffins and cookies and ice and other nice cool foods and stuff* sorry, you may have noticed my brain turning to mush ^-^ (oh look, aussie heat has the same effect as pepper-up, my ears are shooting steam ^-^)

    Stay cool and safe and thank you so much, I'm off to continue writing - you're very motivating you know ^-^

    have fun and thanks (*swings racquet and lobs ball to you* ^^) 

Title: Chapter 9 18 Nov 2009 8:34 am
Reviewer: Min (Anonymous) [Report This]
    oh wow, did that witch bitch curse him so that healing potions don't work? She needs to be chopped up into potions. She is so horribly, wonderfully evil.
    Poor Harry. He's about reaching his limit, eh?

    Author's Response:

    Thanks, I like to think I have a talent when it comes to the witch bitch ^-^  I think she'd ruin any potion she was used in though (can you imagine drinking her... yuck >.<)

    Heh, and I think we've jumped well over Harry's limits, I have no idea how he's still going (and I probably should considering I wrote it huh ^^)

    have fun x

Title: Chapter 9 18 Nov 2009 7:51 am
Reviewer: EllaEleniel (Signed) [Report This]
    Hmm how about an apple cinnamon muffin?

    I was so happy when I got done with my cardio to see that you've updated! It gave me something to read while I cooled down before I go off to finish my next chapter.

    Bad Poppy not paying enough attention so Harry could sneak off. He's certainly sick, and I don't think a little Pepper-up will do the trick. It's worrisome that the diagnostic scans aren't coming up with anything though I suspect it has something to do with Umbridge.

    I totally can't wait for more Sev!

    I sense trouble with Sirus and what will happen when Harry doesn't show up for detention? Uh oh, I hope nothing too horrible.

    *Hexes Umbridge into oblivion*

    There, that should take care of her. ;)

    Your POV was wonderful again, and I see you figured out how to show everyone's emotions and reactions without having to go into everyone's POV, which is a great writing tool to have.

    Great chapter, sproutchild and I can't wait for the next one, though I hope it isn't very climactic because that means there's only a chapter or two before the end. ;)

    Author's Response:

    Ooh nice! *tosses you a few apple cinnamon muffins*  very nice, they're almost as good as blueberry ^^

    hehe, perfect timing then!  excellent, not to mention now I have you next chapter to look forward to more fervently too, yay! ^^

    Yeah, naughty Poppy *smacks back of hand*, don't worry, I wont let her do that again ^^  and good deductive work, Umbridge is the root of all evil after all huh ^^

    hehe okay, more sev coming up too ^-^

    Oh, I wouldnt worry too much about sirius though, he's being his mutt-y kind of self at the moment.  And detention will be excellent fun (for me as the writer at least... ^^) hope you dont get too traumatised next chapter, I'll need something a little more effective than plushies to hand out I think... although hopefully it wont be too bad... hopefully... ^^

    Nice job!  If I get another infestation of Umbridges (Umbridgi?) I know who to call ^^

    And thanks!  I nearly stuffed up hugely with the shift in POV between Poppy and Harry there but I think I fixed it, thanks so much for your help with that, it sucks to get so caught up in your own writing that no one else can have the opportunity to and you help me get it right ^^ *more muffins*

    Oh no, dont worry, I've reduced Harry's self-esteem to so much mush that the next chapter will be a little climax in our long-ish winding road to recovery that Sev will have a much bigger part of... if that made sense ^^... go Harry's mush!

    hehe, have fun and write heaps ^^ (I'm so demanding *throws appeasement muffins*)

     

Title: Chapter 9 18 Nov 2009 7:23 am
Reviewer: B00kw0rm92 (Signed) [Report This]
    Wonderful chapter, I really like this story! Can't wait to see what's next!

    Author's Response:

    Thank you! Heh, hopefully the next chapter wont be too traumatizing, guess we'll see ^^

    have fun x

Title: Chapter 8 12 Nov 2009 1:57 pm
Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]
    I have only just thought to ask what your title means? Antonomasia? I like to think I have a reasonable vocabulary, but I have not heard this word before, now is it in any of my dictionaries. So I can only assume that it is a made up word.

    I have reached the end of what you ahve uploaded and I can only say that I am pleased in a way because I can get my second wind and prepare for more horrors.

    Snape noticing that Harry was far from optimum still only brought out nastiness and threats. Such a stellar human being.

    And I am still waiting to see what that potion might be doing to Harry as all his symptoms can be attributed to his physical injuries and his maundering to his less than satisfactory life.

    Still, I am looking forward to more... especially to Snape waking up to exactly what Harry is enduring (though he has demonstrated that he very well could applaud Umbridge's torture, even though he stops short of physical toture himself. Though he seemed to relish Harry's gasps of pain in his first detention even if he dismissed Harry early, he did not check to see what was paining the boy.)

    I do wonder about Harry going to the hospital wing. surely he doesn't want Madam Pomfrey to see his injuries.

    Well, I will say it. Please update ASAP.

    Author's Response:

    Oh!  You're the first one to ask!  Thank you! - Funnily enough I've tried to put it into words and failed miserably but I suggest wikipedia if you want to know for sure (I was going from page to page of huge, strange words - what I do in my spare time... you cant prove Im a nerd! ^^ - and found it and wrote around the title ^^  It's sort of like a persons name as opposed to their title.  I think they use Napoleon as an example.  Even though he had a ton of titles, his name was Napoleon.  Reminded me of Just Harry you know? ^^

    Hey, even if Im wrong Im very glad I got you looking for it ^^ Isnt reading dictionaries fun? (NOT A NERD! XD)

    Oh good, yes, very good idea.  Breathe in.  And out.  And in.  ^^ Yeah, this isnt the easiest fic to read is it?  No wonder I had to write Impossible, it was probably more for my own sanity after all ^^.

    Hahaha, loved the way you said that.  Yes, Snape the stellar human being.  Isnt that how everyone knows him? ^^ Still, had to make him... Snapish ^^

    Ah the potion... yes, you are right.  His syptoms can all be explained.  But then, what about the feeling he'll occasionally get?  Dont worry, you'll find out ^^

    Hehe, I dont think Snape knew they were gasps of pain so much as Harry being melodramatic, but I know what you mean, he's been a little... less than supportive of our boy hero.  Well, we'll find out exactly what he thinks of Umbridge's methods very soon, and i think you'll be surprised by just how anti-Umbridge he can be ^^

    And Harry's acquiescence, well, he doesnt want to be 'found out' but really, who wouldnt be feeling worn down enough to want a bit of healing by now?  His back's really gotta be hurting, poor thing.  I'm mean TT

    Hehe, will update soon, very soon, so soon you'll be amazed.  Or not... but very soon ^^  Thanks so much, your wonderful and extremely lovely reviews made my day (week ^^) and were so much fun to reply to, I feel like we've had quite the conversation about it all, very very helpful *hands you muffin of your choice (some people have made a point that not everyone is as crazy about blueberry muffins as myself.  Go figure ^-^)

    have fun and Thanks  -stay cool ^^

     

Title: Chapter 7 12 Nov 2009 1:23 pm
Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]
    I find it hard to believe that HArry can move at all. I think the pain of that fall would have had Harry passing out, or at the very least, vomiting... or retching as he didn't really eat any of that great heaping plate of food, did he? Lucky their school robes are black as I am sure Malfoy would have seen blood on Harry's shirt.

    As for exploring Harry's mentality, the exploration can only head southwards, can't it? To the very depths of despair. He will now accept the punishments even more as his due, I am sure. I am surprised that their aren't Aurors at the castle already waiting to arrest Harry. Fudge would have been quick to follow up Skeeters insinuations with action, especially if it seems that the general public is on his side in believing that HArry killed Cedric.

    Why has someone not actually said to Harry that when he suggested that they both take the cup, he was not expecting to be taken to a graveyard in Little Hangleton to play with Lord Voldemort. He was expecting the end of the tournament with both he and Cedric winning. Though I don't suppose it would register with him being so negative and down.

    And all of that sugar is not making me feel better. Sorry. Even if Harry does survive this horror, I feel his sanity will be beyond saving.

    Author's Response:

    Hmm, but then Harry does like to defy the odds doesnt he.  You know, by moving.  ^^ And I've always thought it was handy they wore so much black considering the amount of muck and blood they manage to cover themselves in.  Poor house elves.  Elfs.  Elves.  Whatever ^^ 

    Yeah, Harry's mentality, well it's not a roller coaster so much as that awful dropping ride they have on the Gold Coast that takes you up and drops you over and over... except Harry's doesnt stop when it reaches the ground I suppose... I think this metaphor is getting a little beyond me ^^ (especially since I've never been on the ride XD)  And no, if they didnt take Harry to St Mungos when Skeeter said he was deranged they wont put him in Azkaban on her say so (I wont let them!  Haha, go me! ^^)

    Oooh, nice one there.  I dont know, I'll have to ask Ron and Hermione... maybe Snape will say something when the time comes to address the guilt thing.  I suppose though that the idea of winning the tournament was a little eclipsed by... you know, Cedric dying minutes later and Voldy returning for an epic battle and all... not to mention David Tennant trying to kill him as soon as he got back (sorry, even as Crouch Jr, David is just hot ^^) - how's that for going off on a tangent, a wonderful, wonderful tangent ^^

    Oh, dont lose your optimism *throws more sugar at you - it will help eventually ^^* nothing's beyond saving, 'specially when Snape's involved, and he will be... although if you think Harry's beyond saving now... well...

Title: Chapter 6 12 Nov 2009 12:53 pm
Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]
    I forgot. What was the potion? I was expecting it to have done something before the end of the chapter. perhaops it did and I am too thick to figure out what it did. Perhaps increased the pain? Perhaps made Harry incapable of telling anyone about his adventures in Umbridges office, he he becomes so inclined. Or perhaps it will ensure that Harry does get an infection... a very bad infection. Anyway, instead of continuing to ponder, I might find the answers if I start on the next chapter.

    Lesley~

    Author's Response:

    No no, not at all, you're one of the most intelligent reviewers I've had the pleasure of meeting... in a sense ^^ - no, the potion is a little extra something... hmm, how to explain... it's sort of like the little toffee chocolate things in a box of Roses - you forget about it because the other ones sound so much nicer but then you finally get to it and yum - if yum for you means an extra fact of torture... probably not but then I suppose you never know ^^

    I do so love reading your ideas as you think them, especially when you're so perceptive ^^  You sort of came close but not quite... you'll see... eventually.  I do so like to torture readers as much as Harry dont I?  Well, not as much... believe me I'm not like a real life Umbridge!  *shudders*  I like to think I have much better dress sense ^^

    Keep up the pondering, you're really very good at it ^-^ and it's very enjoyable to read ^^

Title: Chapter 6 12 Nov 2009 12:46 pm
Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]
    yes, I am definitely traumatised. You wrote the violence beautifully, if you can call such barbarity beautiful. I am just so, so filled with hate for this woman, I cannot think of a sufficiently descriptive adjective to describe my loathing.

    Harry's back is going to become infected, isn't it? and no, I do not loathe cats, just some cat owners.

    Are you going to make Harry's ruminations regarding Dd true, I wonder? are you one of those people who is going to make DD as bad as Harry's other protagonists. I hope not. I hate DD bashing.

    Author's Response:

    Oops.  Sorry.  But thank you for the lovely way you said that.  It may have been violent but it was beautiful violence ^-^ (I think that's a good thing... or maybe it's a complete oxymoron for anyone not into S&M... not that I am!  Oh, this is coming out horribly isnt it?)  But that really is nice to hear for me, that you hate her so much now that you cant put words to it ^^ Means I'm reaching my goal, I want every reader to feel the same by the end of this... sort of the point isnt it ^^

    And well done again!  But then, that was perhaps more obvious than other things you've uncovered, Harry's isnt exactly in his right mind enough to be mindful of his back and keeping it clean is he?  Oh well, he'll learn TT

    Very glad you dont loathe cats.  Cats are cute.  Cat owners can... well... not be.  ^^

    DD... hmm, well assuming you mean Dumbledore then no, he wont be in any way evil in this... just a little distracted.  But then if you mean Dudley Dursley (hahaha) well, you never know, he could really be voldemort in disguise!   dum dum dum.  XD

Title: Chapter 5 12 Nov 2009 12:13 pm
Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]
    Harry is right... this woman (toad) is insane. Anyone who can get so much pleasure from intimidation and torture has to be insane. She doesn't want to rehilitate Harry, she wnts to destry him.

    I imagine that the blood quill was been producedas is the first step in what will be a steadily escalating series of tortures. I have to wonder if she is going to use Legilimency on him, as you implied that she is going to try to make him forget who he is and what he stands for... change his perspective. she is going to mess with his mind, literally, I am sure and not just by breaking him with her physical torture.

    This story is beautifully written but it is becoming very difficult to read for me. I found Umbridge in canon even worse than Volde (whom we know is a megalomaniac) in some ways because she had the power of the Ministry behind her and had free reign to do what she would. Obviously there are no laws in place in the wizarding world to prevent mistreatment of children, especially by the people who are supposed to have their best interests at heart. I think she would be happy to see Harry dead as long as she is not implicated in the death.

    Onwards... (but with a great deal of trepidation).

    Lesley~

    Author's Response:

    Yup, but isnt it fun to read?  No... whoops... ^-^.  Come on though, wasnt Umbridge always insane?  Really, getting kids to write in their own blood?  Who sees that on a box of quills and goes 'ooh, perfect!  Just what I was looking for!'  But yeah, My Umbridge wants to go a little further... ah well. I'm being awfully flippant about this arent I? XD

    OOh, well done!  So many people wanted to believe that the first 'torture' would be the worst and after that Snape would suddenly be sweet and fluffy.  No, I'm much meaner than that, and really, where would  the fun be if I didnt do a thorough job?  Oh!  Snap!  You are so getting a special mention in chapter 10 you are!  *whispers* but dont tell anyone your suspicions just yet k?  They're remakably well founded ^^

    Oh I'm sorry.  *give you Snape plushy... and on second though Harry plushy as well*  Yes, I offered these to lot of readers, it isnt the easiest story to read and as much as the fluff is coming, well there has to be a reason for it you know?  Still, very sorry it's not the easiest read.  And I get the impression she wouldnt care if she was implicated in the death as long as Fudge wasnt *rolls eyes*  Surely that was the first tip off in the books that she was insane?  Fudge?  Really?  Wouldnt you have to be seriously wrong in the head to throw your lot in with him?

    Anyway ^^ hope there wasnt too much trepidation (I'm surprised that after the following few chapters you were still clinging on, very hopeful and optimistic of you, go you! ^^)


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