Great start! I bet that out of all the Professors, Snape would be the one to notice that the eye is fake, simply because he would look at them closely because they are like Lily's. :)
Author's Response: Glad you liked. It might take at least a week before Sev notices. He's so thick headed at times. But you'll see when you'll see. TftR.
| Title: Cry in the Dark
| 06 Nov 2009 1:16 am
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| Reviewer: S.S (Anonymous)
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Brilliant story great two chapters can't wait for more
Author's Response: Glad you liked it. I wont be updating MtMtE until I've updated Runner. TftR.
Loved it! And now I'm wondering what the ghostly figure is. Is it Peeves? I'm not sure what the quote is yet, I need to think on it. But I like how Harry is sensing that Snape isn't at all what he seems. Bravo! Oh and I just updated Hawks in case you haven't seen it.
Author's Response: Wonderful, glad you liked it so much! *smirks* Wait and see who it is. Hope you guess the quote before I update. Hmm..okay, I go check. TftR.
| Title: Cry in the Dark
| 04 Nov 2009 6:25 pm
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| Reviewer: Ophelia Mar (Anonymous)
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Ah! So happy to see this fic updated! Hmmmm the title souns familiar. . . . .
Author's Response: Glad you liked. If you figure it out, post. TftR.
Nope. My memory was faulty. That film was "The Way WE Were." The only "They Way They Were" I recall was a 1981 TV special of lots of stars from a certain University for a dedication - I think it might have been Northwestern, but I'm not sure. That was too obscure I suspect to be the quote you referred to: I'm curious now to learn what quote you concealed.
Author's Response: Glad you liked the story. As you posted twice, I will only respond to this one. As I said in the story, you'll all find out next chapter. Keep reading and TftR.
Very nice beginning. I'm looking forward to reading more. You have a gift for expressing a character's state of mind by their posture and actions.
The only guess I can make at the 'title/quote' is from the line in the second to last paragraph, Chapter 2 - "He wondered why things were the way they were."
"The Way They Were" is I believe the title of a Streisand film and song. Was I close?
I don't usually read work in progress story, because I fear they will not be completed, but this one seemed interesting... and I'm just glad I started it! I'm not an expert, but I really really like this story, so please don't stop writing!
Author's Response: I won't. I won't ever just leave it without explaining why. But I'm glad you liked it. TftR.
A ghostly figure? Is it Peeves or someone else? I'm very interested to find out what happens next (Harry's bound to break one of those rules sooner or later). Excellent work!
-P.G.
Author's Response: *snickers* She guessed it. But that's not the question I asked. But very smart of you to figure out who the ghost is. TftR.
Very interesting. I'm curious about what the teachers must think, as Harry surely must look unwell if he's been beaten recently.
-P.G.
Author's Response: Remember, it's only been one night. As Harry is small, he likely disapeered next to his neighbours when he sat down at the Slytherin Table. And the only one who would be observant enough at all times is Sev. Glad you liked, TftR.
| Title: Cry in the Dark
| 04 Nov 2009 8:24 am
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| Reviewer: heidi (Anonymous)
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The charactor developement is starting out very well. yout writing is picturesque without being overly wordy. i usually avoid stories until they are much further along (too much disapointment in getting into a story and having not finish) I am glad i started this one though. PLEASE carry this to an end.
Author's Response: Oh I will. Don't worry about that. This one is too intresting not to finish. But it's sharing time with Runner, so it might not always update right away. I'm glad you liked it enough to read it incomplete. TftR.
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