What a lovely day out, and with an old friend nonetheless. I liked the parallels between Harry and the little boy.
| Title: Chapter 9
| 15 Sep 2013 10:41 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Loved the time with the Grangers and the interest between them
Author's Response: Thank you. I wanted Harry's feelings for Snape and Snape's feelings for Harry to be revealed (to the reader as well as the characters) through an outside party as opposed to writing something like, 'Snape realized he loved Harry while at the fair.' Ick.
| Title: Chapter 9
| 05 Nov 2009 1:59 pm
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| Reviewer: Em (Anonymous)
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I am really enjoying your story. I love a complex story line. Thank you for writing and I look forward to your updates.
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying the story! I hope you keep reading.
This is a fantastic story so far! I read it in two nights (wanted to wait to review until I finished what was here so far)! It's very detailed, well thought out, well organized, and so far well-written. There are some minor spelling and grammatical errors, but aside from that...Great story! I'm looking forward to more of this story!
Love how in his semi-consciousness, Harry called Snape "Dad." Probably surprised everyone! And I was extremely worried when Lucius showed up again! Agh! And Draco's reactions to everything was interesting...Is he a victim too, in your story? And Severus's reaction to Lily's coin makes me wonder if he had anything to do with her having it in the first place...Did he give it to her, or something? That would be interesting! Okay, I need to stop.
As I said already, I am VERY interested to know where this is going. Keep up the good work! Thank you for writing such LONG chapters, too!
Author's Response: Please excuse the errors; I don't have a beta, but I appreciate the constructive criticism. I'm glad you're so curious about everything. It tells me that I'm doing something right... Um, as much as I would love to give you the dirt on Lucius, Draco, and Lily's coin, I'm gonnna have to stay mum on those topics. My evil plan is to keep you VERY interested! I'm glad you're enjoying the long chapters, because believe me, they could be longer. I'm having to be ruthless when I edit, but hopefully it doesn't show too badly. Thank so, so much for the thoughtful review!
I am thoroughly enjoying this story and can't wait for your next update. The characters are believable and the dialogue is very well written.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you're enjoying the story! I hope the recent update was worth the wait. Thank you!
| Title: Chapter 9
| 31 Oct 2009 6:52 pm
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| Reviewer: Monica (Anonymous)
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wonderful story
Author's Response: Thank you.
| Title: Chapter 9
| 31 Oct 2009 11:03 am
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| Reviewer: reven (Anonymous)
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Great so far. Love Harry slipping and calling Snape 'Dad'. Can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading!
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