| Title: Mary Worth’s Story
| 31 Mar 2010 1:09 am
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| Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous)
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Oh! That was great who will she kill first hmm I would say Vernon and go from there.voldy would be hard for a while.
Well, I hope she gets Uncle Vernon! The scum deserves it! And now that Sel knows about Voldemort's soul, can they remove it from her? Mary was really interesting. I liked how Severus was there to protect Sel when she needed it.
| Title: Mary Worth’s Story
| 02 Nov 2009 8:26 pm
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| Reviewer: Catalpa (Anonymous)
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The final two chapters are nicely creepy and build up the suspense. I was wondering how it would all turn out! It feels as if you could take the story even further, beyond the Halloween challenge, if you choose to! The only criticism I can voice concerns the numerous misspellings and typos throughout, along with inappropriate word choice (especially homonyms). These errors are really distracting to your readers. If you decide to continue the story, please try to get some help proofreading!
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