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Reviews For Longing to Belong
Title: Chapter 1 15 Nov 2009 5:22 am
Reviewer: CrazyDragon (Signed) [Report This]
    ::snorts:: That's a ba-a-ad eavesdropping habit those boys have...maybe Severus should train 'em up to spy? After introducing them to the concept of *subtlety,* that is. I can't wait to see how Severus attempts to break them of that habit! (Note, I said "attempt". I don't know if even Voldemort could succeed!)

    Heh. That was some good teenage angst!

    Author's Response: Lol, that was the most entertaining review I've ever read. Thank you. I don't think they'll ever master enough subtlety to spy, even if they worked on it 24/7--he will try to break the habit, but he's got a looong way to go.
Title: Chapter 1 10 Nov 2009 9:39 am
Reviewer: dracosgoddess123 (Signed) [Report This]
    i really like where this story is going. love how it was written and im a HUGE sucker for angsty fics so this one is one for my faves!!! cant wait til the next chapter!

    Author's Response: I'm a sucker for angst as well, so plan on having quite a bit within this story! Thank you!!
Title: Chapter 1 10 Nov 2009 4:43 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow, this is your first story? I'm very impressed, and really anxious to see where this story is going. Nice work.

    I love how Severus is concerned, but not overly so, over Harry. You really handled Harry and Snape's emotions so well, and I loved the way Harry finally opened up to Severus.

    I'm also anxious to see where Draco fits into it all.

    I look forward to your next update.

    Author's Response: Thank you, I was hoping it was in character enough, and it seems to be. What a relief! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Title: Chapter 1 10 Nov 2009 4:37 am
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    Holy cow, this was great! And congrats on being story 802, lol. ^_^

    I really, really liked it. Are you sure this is your first story? The emotions were amazing, the chapter was long, Snape managed to stay in character and yet be helpful when Harry was in a time of need and Draco is perfect!

    Thanks so much for sharing! I give you a ten! ^_^ Please update real soon?

    Author's Response:

    Thank you! I rewrote this a half dozen times before I felt comfortable sharing it, I hope it continues to be pleasing. I should have an update soon!

Title: Chapter 1 10 Nov 2009 2:15 am
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    This is pretty impressive for a first fic. Harry's depression is conveyed perfectly and I love how Draco keeps sticking his nose where it doesn't belong.

    My one suggestion would be to get a beta. You have some typos in here that dampen the quality of the fic and they'd be easy fixes. There are tons of betas on P&S--I think you should find one and take advantage of someone who is willing to help you make this into a real piece of art.

    Very nice work--I look forward to reading more.

    -P.G.

    Author's Response: Thank you! I will definitely look for a beta, thanks for the suggestion.
Title: Chapter 1 09 Nov 2009 8:01 pm
Reviewer: S.S (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Good chapter would like to read more

    Author's Response: Thank you!
Title: Chapter 1 09 Nov 2009 6:57 pm
Reviewer: DaughterOfAres (Signed) [Report This]
    Hi!

    This is a really good start! I can't wait to read more.

    At times it did seem that Harry was opening up to quickly to Snape and I had to reminded myself that he had been there a while. It might help if you remind the readers more that Harry has been there for awhile already. Granted I don't know whats in the next chapter, but perhaps a paragraph elaborating on how he got there would help. Or add a sentence or two here and there giving a specific time? For example when Severus is going over the rules with them Harry mentions that its the third time he's heard them. Perhaps say its the third time in two weeks or something like that.

    I love how you portray Draco. He's still sort of 'evil' yet he's changing sides and you capture that really well.

    This sounds like it will be a great story and I'm eagerly awaiting an update.

    Author's Response: Thank you. I plan on revealing some of the back story in chapters 2 and 3. I'm glad you like it!
Title: Chapter 1 09 Nov 2009 6:43 pm
Reviewer: Sonseeahray (Anonymous) [Report This]
    A good start and I would like to read more

    Author's Response: Thank you!

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