does james actually care at all for harry? if it was my child the first thing i would ask is how they were, james didn't even think to do that, james needs to get a reality check, otherwise he will lose what custody he has
Author's Response: He does love Harry, he just doesn't know how to show it properly. He, and Sirius, tend to think of Harry as another adult instead of the child that he is.
Yes finally James is realizing he's screwed up. It's sad that it takes something like that to make some people wake up to how stupid their behavior is! Good for Andromeda!
Author's Response: Sometimes things like this are the only things that will get people to wake up and see how stupid their behavior really is.
Nice to see Harry will be okay. James is just such, such, such a git!!!!
Author's Response: Yes, but hopefully he's starting to see the light.
Yes you have and now you have to pay the piper. I loved how cute Harry was even with his broken arm. And Andromeda was good too. Excellent fic!
Author's Response: Harry is quite adorable. Some kids, like Harry, just can't help but be cute all the time. Andromeda loves Harry just like she loves her own niece and nephew...and she just wants what is best for Harry. That doesn't involve having to set his broken bones because James wasn't thinking.
| Title: Advice From A Healer
| 13 Dec 2009 6:33 am
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| Reviewer: Judy (Signed)
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Loved this chapter! James has needed to be told off for a long time. I think this was the last straw for everyone involved.
Author's Response: He really has needed to be told off. Lily tried, but it didn't work. Sometimes it just takes an outsider to get the job done.
that was very well written i loved it! looking forward to the next chapter! cant wait to see what the consequences are
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
He finally realizes that he messed up; it's a miracle! Too bad it's too late. Andromeda is right; his parents should have disaplined him more often when he was a child, perhaps if they had Harry wouldn't have gotten hurt at all. It's time for James to grow up and realize that his behavior is only hurting his son and if he continues with it he deserves to lose the right to see him. In the end it will be what's best for Harry that matters. James is going to have to suffer the consequences of his actions and I have a feeling he isn't going to like what is coming.
Author's Response: He's not going to like what's coming, but at least he's finally realized that he has messed up. That will go a long way. Thanks for reading!
another great chapter. update soon.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading!
| Title: Advice From A Healer
| 12 Dec 2009 8:06 am
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| Reviewer: Montgomery Swift (Anonymous)
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I've read through all of this, trying to give it a chance since I like all of your other stories. But there's really nothing that I like about this. Your characters are completely one-sided, without any depth. James is a complete idiot, who does everything absolutely wrong and Lily and Snape are the exact opposite, doing everything right and perfect and wonderful. Your portrayal of Harry is very unrealistic as well. He loved everything Snape loves and hates everything James loves. And quite frankly, I think it's rather criminal the way Lily and Severus are treating James as if he is some sort of second class citizen. Severus should be the one who's slapped around by the healer. It's really cruel of Severus to refer to Harry as his son to James. And what sort of healer screams at a person like that?
And for the record, children ride horses all the time. Sure, a Hippogriff is not a horse but it's the same concept. Kids ride elephants too. Child services wouldn't be called because a child fell off of one.
I don't really understand why you wrote this story except as a vehicle to bash one of JK's characters. James has flaws, sure. But so does Snape. Interesting that you never mention those.
Give your characters more depth; it will make them more believable and the story will be more enjoyable to read.
Author's Response: I'm sorry that you don't like the story.
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