| Title: Chapter 1
| 08 Dec 2009 2:23 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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A little rushed at the start and I would have liked a little back story but great idea and I liked the interaction between the boys. I'm looking forward to reading the next part. Thank you for writing
so intriquing-I am excited for more
| Title: Chapter 1
| 07 Dec 2009 8:34 am
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| Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous)
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Great chapter, this story looks good. I love draco,harry snape stories. 'post soon!
Interesting start. Can't wait to see the next chapter.
Scary, scary! Ah poor Harry! It looks like he is in for a very rough summer, and Professor Snape sounds scary! I liked Draco and how he explained everything. I wonder how Snape will go through Harry's belongings and what he will say Harry can't have. I hope that Harry is there to watch when he does it. Very, very interesting plot premise. I'm liking it a lot.
I wonder what happened to Draco, or rather what happened to Mr. Malfoy that made it so that Draco can't stay with him.
Make sure that you catch some mixed up words:
"there" is a place, like "here." They look a lot alike, "here" and "there."
"Their" means ownership, like "their socks are the socks that belong to them."
Hope that you update soon! And whatever happened to your other story, Home Is Where the Heart Is?
Author's Response: I've had about 500 words of the next chapter of Home Is Where The Heart Is wrote for the last 4 months or so, and I just can't seem to get any further. And then i got this idea, and it wouldn't leave me alone until I wrote it!
Oh, and welcome to the board, Great job.
Oh, very nice beginning.
I'm surprised that Draco seems so worried about displeasing Snape, when at school, he acts like such a prat. I guess that Snape is not as lenient with him at school, as everyone thinks.
I'm very interested to see where this is going. I'm looking forward to your next update.
| Title: Chapter 1
| 07 Dec 2009 2:28 am
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| Reviewer: AllyKat (Anonymous)
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Some of your word useage detracts from the story, like there/their, or down for door.
a good start, i wonder how snape will act, it sounds like snape runs his house like a army camp, everything done on time and never waiver from the roster
| Title: Chapter 1
| 06 Dec 2009 11:36 pm
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| Reviewer: Sheila (Anonymous)
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Great start. I'd love to read more of it. Please update soon !!!!!!!
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