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Reviews For On a Christmas Eve
-P.G. Author's Response: I always thought he did...Have a Merry Christmas P.G!
I wish I saw Dumble in that riddiculous attire :) Author's Response: lol Wouldn't that have been great? Have a Merry Christmas too!
Merry christmas hun xx Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it. Merry Christmas to you too!
You did a very good job at keeping both characters in character, and Sev and Harry both got what they wanted for Christmas! Yay! This story is a very self-contained one-shot, so much so that I don't even care to find out if Harry really got socks from Dumbledore for Christmas. My only criticism is that opening with dialogue is jarring to the reader. It's best to set the scene with a paragraph or two that grounds the reader. By that I mean setting the scene with some a descriptive passage or a little narrative so the reader knows what's going on from the get go and doesn't feel confused. Author's Response: Glad you liked it Ella, and thanks for the criticism. I'll look into it. But I'm glad you liked it overall. I had this idea but I just couldn't get it to sound how I wanted to and I ended up rewriting it like four times. But I'm happy you liked it. Thanks for reading!! Still looking forward to your next update! :D
A very heartwarming story. Author's Response: Yep. The Ol' Grinch of Hogwarts grew a heart. Thanks for reading! |
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