Potions and Snitches
Snape and Harry Gen Fanfiction Archive

Title: Chapter 1 19 Oct 2022 9:00 am
Reviewer: Treedweller (Signed) [Report This]
    This is an interesting start; but the conversation is a little hard to follow. I cannot tell sometimes who is talking!
Title: Chapter 1 10 Jan 2011 1:39 am
Reviewer: topsell (Signed) [Report This]
    I really like the start here! And I adore the end of this chapter - of Snape talking to Lily's photograph. It's quite beautiful imagery.

    Author's Response: Snape loved Lily, so I guess he can indulge himself in the privacy of his room and talk to her. Thanks a lot for reading my story. LL
Title: Chapter 1 12 Jan 2010 6:36 pm
Reviewer: RhiannanT (Signed) [Report This]
    “You won’t believe what a little care would make of the boy.”

    “We are talking about a child Pomona, not a plant….”


    ROFL!!!

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for your review. Pomona is an expert in plants, isn't she? But boys and plants need atention and care. I hope you will like the rest of the story.

    LL

Title: Chapter 1 11 Jan 2010 9:25 pm
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    This is a very good start! I like how all the staff is involved in getting Harry better treatment and I think Severus will do well as Harry's mentor. His talking with Lily's portrait at the end was sweet.

    I did notice a spelling error

    "dotting grandfather already" ought to be doting, although Albus can be dotty sometimes . .. sorry a little joke.

    Oh and if you have Severus thinking, it might be easier to put his thoughts in italics, makes it easier for a reader to distinguish them and make them stand out. You can do this for any character thinking actually, or even when a character is speaking in another language, like Parseltongue or mind to mind. I do it all the time in my fics.

    Just a few tips, hope you aren't offended.

    Author's Response: Thank you very much for you review and for the tips. Some times this things are difficult to catch, I will always appreciate tips and advices. Thank you very much for reading.

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