Potions and Snitches
Snape and Harry Gen Fanfiction Archive

Title: Chapter 6 13 Jan 2010 2:23 am
Reviewer: S.S (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I love the story. Can't wait for more

    Author's Response:

    Hello:

    Thank you very much for your review. I will update soon. LL

Title: Chapter 2 13 Jan 2010 12:05 am
Reviewer: Chasergirl (Signed) [Report This]
    I like the plot and you have a good idea here, but the grammar and spelling could use some work, perhaps have someone go through it for mistakes, most of them just seem like type o's.

    Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review. We have gone over the charpters several times and thought that we had cought all the mistakes. I would appreciate it very much if you were to point them to me, so I would be able to adress them. Thank you for reading. LL
Title: Chapter 5 12 Jan 2010 10:26 pm
Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Very Nice I look forward to the following chapters.

    Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing, there is a new chapter now. LL
Title: Chapter 5 12 Jan 2010 7:03 pm
Reviewer: RhiannanT (Signed) [Report This]
    I like!! I really like the insulation thing - it's really realistic, and telling. Poor Harry!

    Author's Response:

    Thank you very much for your review. I realized that Harry had not bought any clothes for the cold and I wanted Snape to get him clothes.

    I hope you will keep on reading. Thanks again. LL

Title: Chapter 1 12 Jan 2010 6:36 pm
Reviewer: RhiannanT (Signed) [Report This]
    “You won’t believe what a little care would make of the boy.”

    “We are talking about a child Pomona, not a plant….”


    ROFL!!!

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for your review. Pomona is an expert in plants, isn't she? But boys and plants need atention and care. I hope you will like the rest of the story.

    LL

Title: Chapter 1 11 Jan 2010 9:25 pm
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    This is a very good start! I like how all the staff is involved in getting Harry better treatment and I think Severus will do well as Harry's mentor. His talking with Lily's portrait at the end was sweet.

    I did notice a spelling error

    "dotting grandfather already" ought to be doting, although Albus can be dotty sometimes . .. sorry a little joke.

    Oh and if you have Severus thinking, it might be easier to put his thoughts in italics, makes it easier for a reader to distinguish them and make them stand out. You can do this for any character thinking actually, or even when a character is speaking in another language, like Parseltongue or mind to mind. I do it all the time in my fics.

    Just a few tips, hope you aren't offended.

    Author's Response: Thank you very much for you review and for the tips. Some times this things are difficult to catch, I will always appreciate tips and advices. Thank you very much for reading.
Title: Chapter 5 11 Jan 2010 9:24 pm
Reviewer: S.S (Anonymous) [Report This]
    brilliant story can't wait for more. you can't read chapter three

    Author's Response: Thank you very much for reading and reviewing, I've fixed the chapters. I hope you will enjoy them. Thanks again.

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