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Reviews For White sheet, Black blob
Anyways, I'm not sure that I agree with Harry's spot being larger than Snapes' though. I mean, we don't really know about all of the terrible things Snape has done. I think they'd probably be about equal, blob-wise, when it comes right down to it. However, I don't think either really intended for themselves to be immersed in such evil. And really, how can Harry consider himself so evil when most of the deaths around him were caused by Voldemort, not by him. He was a factor in them, yes, but Voldemort was the one who did the dirty deed, when it comes right down to it. I guess what I'm trying to get at is that I don't think either character could accurately gauge their guilt because they feel guilty for things that are out of their control. Writing-wise, this could really use a beta. If you want one, all you have to do is request one in the Shoutbox. There's usually someone who is willing to do that sort of thing and it would save you from having places with incomplete sentences, like this: rolls eyes “Not really. You'd still notice the mark, and they wouldn't be fresh, would they?” Instead of just 'rolls eyes,' it would sound better as "Harry rolled his eyes" or "I rolled my eyes" if you were doing from a first person p.o.v. I did enjoy this fic though and the big idea of how to achieve forgiveness that it centered around. This was my favorite quote: “No one deserves forgiveness Snape. It's not something you can earn. If these really were our lives neither of us has a clean white piece of paper. And neither of us can get them as clean as they were before.” Thanks for sharing! -P.G. Author's Response: Hi, Sorry - realise you wrote this AGES ago - I had replied but my computer deleted the text. grrr. Anyway, thanks for your review. Just one thing - clearly my writing's confuzzeling - Snape draws a black blob all over his paper - totally screws it up, because HE thinks HE deserves a huge mess. Harry just draws a normal blob. I don't think people do guage guilt accurately. In my experience they either don't feel guilty - because they're too arrogant/self-righteous or they feel too much guilt. I think it takes a HUGE amount of practice and self-control and a faith that someone thinks you are worth something in their eyes no matter what to acurately think about and deal with your guilt. I think Harry could consider himself to have done wrong, (not evil though) because he tends to blame himself. Snape did too, or he wouldn't have spent his entire life trying to rid himself of the burden of Lily's death. Phew! That was long! Thanks for the review! :D Hope it makes more sense now. x
Author's Response: Thanks. :) I was going for more of a conversation only, but I'm thinking I might go back at some point and flesh it out a bit.
Author's Response: Thank you! I wasn't sure how it would go down but thought I would give it a try.
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