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Reviews For Moon Fire
Title: Midnight on Privet Drive 20 Apr 2021 11:59 am
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    Beautiful and touching interaction between Harry and Snape - and on the Knight Bus, nonetheless!
Title: Midnight on Privet Drive 21 Nov 2012 11:28 pm
Reviewer: Anne (Anonymous) [Report This]
    4 Privet Drive
    Little Whinging
    Surrey

    The first line is the street, the second the town, the third the county.
    Surrey is a county in the south-east of England; a county is somewhat analogous to an American state.

    Thus "two towns away from Surrey" completely breaks even a vaguely knowledgeable reader from the story and into confusion.
    To put it bluntly "two towns away from Surrey" makes about as much sense as saying 'two towns away from Florida'.
    And as Little Whinging is utterly fictional (but within an hour or so's drive of London) it would be better to either pick a real life location in Surrey, or just say 'were going to be pulling into Little Whinging in about ten minutes'.

    Aside from that, and some minor confusion over characterisation which will probably be made clearer later, an enjoyable, and interesting AU.

    I am a little concerned with the phrasing over Snape's plan to initiate Harry. It doesn't sound like he has much of a choice in the matter . . .
Title: Midnight on Privet Drive 06 Mar 2010 9:11 am
Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    What a great chapter, I love that Sev got harry to open up and I am thrilled that the dursleys will get theres and harry will be away from them! YEAH!
Title: Midnight on Privet Drive 06 Mar 2010 12:59 am
Reviewer: CarlinPaddy (Signed) [Report This]
    Thank all that is Holy for Snape, eh? Lovely chapter.

    Author's Response: Oh yeah. Thanks so much!
Title: Midnight on Privet Drive 04 Mar 2010 8:33 am
Reviewer: Fairner (Signed) [Report This]
    Aw Harry and Monie so cute ^^
    o.o oh gosh kissing already lol!

    I wonder when Sev will explain more will Harry find out about Moon Fire? Maybe not cause it look him awhile to realize Sev was talking about himself XD
    Maybe living with Sev with jump start Harry's brain since it was suffocating with the Dursleys.

    Author's Response:

    Yeah, they're gettin really serious. 

    That chapter will be coming up eventually.

    hahaha! Yes, that will definitely happen.

Title: Midnight on Privet Drive 04 Mar 2010 5:12 am
Reviewer: Snapesexfiend (Signed) [Report This]
    I just love this! Sev is so clever. An outbreak of a virus! I was laughing so hard when I read that. Too bad he couldn't give them a virus for real. A nasty one. I'm so glad Harry told him what really happened, now he can get help and the Dursleys will get theirs, right?

    Go Snape!

    Author's Response: Thanks so much! Oh yes, they will. just read the next part to see how.
Title: Midnight on Privet Drive 04 Mar 2010 4:51 am
Reviewer: Judy (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow the dynamic between the two of them here was so intense. I could feel the emotions coming off them. Beautiful!

    And the Dursleys are going to be in so much trouble and they don't even know it.

    Author's Response: Thanks! So glad you like this!
Title: Midnight on Privet Drive 04 Mar 2010 12:53 am
Reviewer: DrSnape (Signed) [Report This]
    Felt so bad for both of them I cried! Really really good so far. Can't wait to see what Sev does to the Dursleys! Excellent chapter!!

    Author's Response: Aww. Thanks so much!
Title: Midnight on Privet Drive 03 Mar 2010 10:06 am
Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Yes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Author's Response: Thank you!
Title: Midnight on Privet Drive 03 Mar 2010 12:32 am
Reviewer: hypercell (Signed) [Report This]
    This story is really good, I can't wait for more!

    Author's Response: Thanks, more has been posted!

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