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Reviews For Moon Fire
Given school's only just broken up this is set - at the VERY latest - in mid-July, and maybe as early as mid-June. As such, due to British weather during the summer months, the blackberries would be nowhere near ripe. Typically they ripen during very late August and September. The beeswax thing is drawn straight from the Greek sirens yes? Not a typical power associated with dryads, but given they're both of Greek origin I don't see why not. And finally the last thing that really irks e throughout your stories: your British characters using 'quit' to mean 'stop'. This is very much an Americanism, one that you won't even find children using all that often in 2012, let alone in 1995. And *especially* not older generations of witches and wizards or the very articulate such as Severus. Here, with the exception of a few idioms, 'quit' tends to be used in phrases such as 'I quit my job' or 'He quit the premises' with the understanding that 'quit' means 'to leave' or 'to stop', generally with the former being the most prevalent. Thus 'X left Y' is completely synonymous with 'X quit Y', although with the understanding that 'quit' has more permanence to it. Where an American would say 'quit it' a Brit would say 'leave it' or 'leave off' in a casual discussion/argument with family, friends or people of a similar (or perhaps younger age). Someone who naturally is rather formal, or someone who finds themselves in a formal situation/talking with someone older or requiring respect/is in a position of authority would say 'please stop X', 'cease X' and similar phrases. Aside from these very picky British critiques I do like this chapter and how Harry is trusting Severus enough to even subconsciously seek him out for comfort and protection, while showing Dumbledore merely to be a fallible human.
I blame much of what has happened on Albus Dumbledore. At the very least, he should have personally checked with the Dursleys to make sure that they were willing to take Harry in. He should have also made sure that they would love and care for him as if he was their own child. Harry's life was filled with hunger and despair and it could have been prevented so easily. I think he should do it really soon. The longer he waits, the more upset Harry will become at him. It would probably be best if he tells him before they return to Hogwarts. Great chapter!
Loved the end and how they have finally started to bond.
"Our bodies are our temples" and if you like scant decorations, decorate yourself as such! I personally have a catfish theme going...
I'd say he could prolly tell Harry about Moon Fire in a couple of days or tonight. He needs to tell Harry more about Selene and talk about his initiation, which, if I remember properly is a segway into MF, right? Didn't he get MF sort of as an initiation "gift"? I need to double check that... |
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