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Reviews For The Boy Who..?
I adore the internal conflict brewing and am in love with the development of the relationship between Severus and Harry. Looking forward to how this is (hopefully) resolved.
Looking forward to what's to come!
Looking forward to what's to come!
Having said that, I'm not too thrilled with how you've done Harry. He swung extremely, extremely fast from a sincere 'I hate you' to basically happily calling Snape 'Dad'. You mentioned that Snape needed to earn Harry's trust and I never saw that happening. There was no transition in Harry's interactions, no period of testing out whether Snape's change of heart was real, no distrust, and I just found that hard to swallow. Well, you can't change it now, so I guess if I pretend the whole beginning hatred was more indifference, I can make the rest of the story work for me. Oh, and I think the build-up of Draco's jealousy was well done. It wasn't just finding out about Harry and Snape's relationship, it was having Snape miss out on Christmas with him (a tangible reality instead of an imagined possibility) that pushed Draco over the edge. As a reader, I can sympathize with him instead of scorn him for wanting to curse Harry. It's not Harry's fault, but he's the only person Draco can really rage at about the whole thing. Poor Draco. Author's Response: Thank you for the well-thought review. ^^ While perhaps Harry's change of perspective was a bit quick, I feel it was not all that unrealistic, really. Snape has worked to try to remedy his past mistakes, as well as consistly bahaved in a paternal manner. True, he has yet to do anything earth-shattering, but little things add up. Furthermore, as a boy who has never really had a family he could call his own, he really craves that. I feel that he is needy enough and young enough that he would let go of his feelings of hurt and betrayal to give his father a chance, reckless though that may seem. But that is how I see it. What is more, the story is, as yet, incomplete. Anyhow, I'm glad that you are otherwise enjoying the story so far and hope that it will continue to please in other aspects. Thanks again for taking the time to let me know what you think. ~D
Author's Response: Thank you! More to come. ^^
Update soon, please. I'm really enjoying this. Author's Response: ^^ Will do. Thanks for the R&R! ~D
Author's Response: ^^ I will attempt to update soon. Thanks for the review. ~D
Sirius is entering the picture. This should get interesting. Now, a Godfather in the mix. More drama! Yipeeeee!!!! Author's Response: Draco is really asking for it, alright. More to come. ^^ Thanks for the R&R! ~D
Author's Response: Draco is most certainly going to get himself into a whole heap of trouble. Thanks for the R&R. ~D |
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