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Title: Melodies of Life 15 May 2010 10:28 pm
Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed) [Report This]
    Sweet, but sad...a very poignant chapter. The grief that Hermione and her mother share is so real. I'm glad that Hermione has wonderful friends to be with her. Studying and school life in the fall will likely help her too. I think I feel worse for Jean Granger; Hermione is at school for much of the year and then she really will be alone. I suppose she can keep busy with work, but it will be very hard.

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for the review. I'm glad my portrayal of mourning seems realistic and, you're right, Hermione will find many positive distractions from her grief. Jean, whose husband was her only relative (other than Hermione) and closest friend, is definately going to feel the pinch more: she is no longer safe in her hometown and Voldemort, if he rises again, could find her in an instant unless she bases herself at Uroborus. However, there is a muggle boy, a de facto orphan, who needs a home to come back to during the school year...

Title: Melodies of Life 14 May 2010 3:25 am
Reviewer: Pellegrina (Anonymous) [Report This]
    That was touching and very well written! It's one of the most difficult things to write about and you did a very, very good job! I'm really impressed how you handled it, how you described the process of mourning - it was incredibly authentic! You must've really thought it through and it sounds like you've experienced loss in your own life. You have my deepest respect for this chapter!!!

    Author's Response: Thank you, I'm really glad that you enjoyed reading it ^^.
Title: Melodies of Life 13 May 2010 11:56 pm
Reviewer: natholius (Anonymous) [Report This]
    This is an absolutely amazing story! i love how youve pitched the story on its head, especially with the malfoys and Hissy. Hissy and Salazar are my absolute favourite characters now! Keep up the amazing work!

    Author's Response: Thanks ^^ I'm really glad you're enjoying it and that you like my portrayal of Slytherin and Hissy :)
Title: Melodies of Life 13 May 2010 10:23 pm
Reviewer: Baghi (Signed) [Report This]
    Very well done (uh-huh about the spelling/grammar errors. Good way to cover up *snicker* Then again, you could be telling the truth.) Kudos on a well written, if sad, chapter.

    Author's Response: Thanks for the review ^^. Lol! No, the spelling, gramatical mistakes are purely intentional- or I'd have quietly nipped in and corrected them as I usually do!
Title: Melodies of Life 13 May 2010 9:54 am
Reviewer: silverstargirl (Signed) [Report This]
    It's always hard to lose a loved one and it will take Hermione and Jean a long time to find some semblance of normalcy in their lives, but at least they have the comfort of each other to help them through this. When they are ready, their circle of friends will help to further comfort them and help them to move on into the future that is ahead of them.

    Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Yes, it's going to be a long road to recovery and they'll always miss William but their friends will be there for them and help them forge a future.
Title: Melodies of Life 13 May 2010 7:59 am
Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Love the way harrys letter was written. You put great detail into your writing. Are snap;e and jean going to connect? Just asking. Great chapter.

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for the review: I try to make my writing as realistic as possible and give each character a discernable 'voice', both in their writing and speech. I can't really answer your question but I will comment that, as Jean is in an emotionally vulnerable position and Severus is a strong, kind, steady character, it's a 50/50 chance that, at some point, she'll notice his attractions.  

Title: Melodies of Life 13 May 2010 5:20 am
Reviewer: tambrathegreat (Signed) [Report This]
    I loved the authenticity of Harry's letter.

    It's nice to see the Malfoys be decent in a story. I think if the situation in cannon had been different, they would have been okay to be around.

    Good job on the chapter. Mourning is always so hard to write.

    Author's Response:

    Thanks ^^ I think the Malfoys have some first rate qualities, e.g. their love for each other, and, had Harry accepted Draco's hand in the beginning, the situation might have evolved very differently. I'm glad you liked Harry's letter; it's the first time I've written one from him and I really wanted to show that, although he is bright and empathetic, he's still very much a child. (In his academic acheivements, I've put Harry at the level which he should have reached in the canon if he'd applied himself. In the canon he spends most of his year mucking around with Ron, playing chess, exploding snap and generally frittering away study time.) 

    Mourning is hard to write because people mourn in so many ways; some go numb- for weeks, months, even years, others become furiously angry, many go into denial and a few, the luckiest ones, are able to weep and heal. And, of course, people go through good minutes and bad minutes, so there's inconsistancy but, at the same time, one has to be consistant in that inconsistancy or the character's behaviour won't be realistic. I hope that my portrayal of mourning was believable.

Title: Melodies of Life 13 May 2010 2:04 am
Reviewer: DazzlingD (Signed) [Report This]
    so sweet and tender

    Author's Response: Thanks for the review ^^ I'm glad you liked it
Title: Melodies of Life 13 May 2010 1:25 am
Reviewer: Stefunny2010 (Signed) [Report This]
    I love how sweet you can make the characters out to be, most boys their age would definitely not think of sending homework to a friend. I also really like that Ron had a letter in their also, he's not all bad apparentally;) I think you did a great job with this chapter and I really liked the ending line, it just fit.

    Author's Response:

    Thanks ^^. I think most 11 year old boys would consider it base treachery to gather homework for a friend (considering that they'll use any excuse to get out of doing their homework lol!) Theo, however, is very serious and bookish and, as Hermione is his study-buddy, he knows enough about her to put two and two together ^^.  

    I'm glad you liked the ending line; I knew that, in my end paragraph, I was going to finish on a hopeful note but the exact wording literally came to me in a flash of inspiration as I finished writing the chapter. All credit goes to Uematsu: he wrote the song I was paraphrasing.

Title: Melodies of Life 13 May 2010 1:22 am
Reviewer: B00kw0rm92 (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, how sad!!!! It was a really good chapter! I can't wait to see what's next!

    Author's Response: Thanks ^^ I hope you'll enjoy the next two chapters :)

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