| Title: Chapter 5: Introduction to Wolfbane
| 25 Mar 2010 9:44 pm
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| Reviewer: Lady Julie Snape (Anonymous)
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Harry being bitten and turned into a werewolf is rare and provides the author with oppurtunities galore.
It gives you a chance to explore how Harry will react to certain events and characters. Is there conflict between father and son because of Harry's wolf instincts? Are his senses heightened in human form or does it only apply when he's a wolf? Are his reactions more wolf-like?
On another note, I find your story lacks detail. Please, don't be afraid to add it! How does a character feel when he walks into a room? What does the room look like? How do the characters react with each other?
This is not a flame, and it's not meant to be taken as one. It's just a few pointers, that, I find, help my own writing. The only way to get better is to practice and if you love doing it, that's even better!
Grab that bull by the horns and keep writing!
Respectfully yours,
Lady Julie Snape
| Title: Chapter 5: Introduction to Wolfbane
| 25 Mar 2010 7:47 pm
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| Reviewer: S.S (Anonymous)
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Brilliant chapter... I love the Harry/snape bonding in the story.. hope you update soon
| Title: Chapter 5: Introduction to Wolfbane
| 25 Mar 2010 3:21 pm
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| Reviewer: Shadow (Anonymous)
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Nice chapter. I thought that Ron will be git a little longer...never mind.
Thanks for chapter!
| Title: Chapter 4: A New Life For Harry
| 23 Mar 2010 10:42 am
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| Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous)
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OH that was so cute I love how he growled to defend his mate.
| Title: Chapter 4: A New Life For Harry
| 22 Mar 2010 7:46 pm
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| Reviewer: S.S (Anonymous)
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Another great chapter... can't wait for more... glad everything workd out
| Title: Chapter 4: A New Life For Harry
| 22 Mar 2010 6:09 pm
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| Reviewer: Shadow (Anonymous)
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So Harry found his mate... I think that Luna is very good choice, they will understand each other. =o)
Severus took his position of father very well.
I'm interested how will go Harry's first transformation...so update soon! =o)
| Title: Chapter 4: A New Life For Harry
| 22 Mar 2010 5:47 pm
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| Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed)
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I liked how Harry and Severus are getting along and how Sev reassured Lupin that it wasn't his fault. I hope that they will continue to be friends. Harry needs to talk to Lupin to find out more about dealing with the werewolf curse. It would be funny if Severus did have to smack Ron, he'd probably threaten to tell his mum and then she'd smack him too! Although I do wonder where Sev got that authority from? Because I thought it wasn't school policy to discipline kids that way unless they were your own.
| Title: Chapter 3: Visiting the Dursleys
| 22 Mar 2010 5:45 pm
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| Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed)
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Really liked how Sev dealt with Petunia. He should do something similar to Vernon and Dudley.
One question, why would Dumbles want to thrash Severus? He saved Harry from being poor and destitute and is willing to be a father to the boy. He should be thanking Severus. Really, the old man needs to get a grip on reality here. Severus is his employee and an adult, not some little kid.
| Title: Chapter 4: A New Life For Harry
| 22 Mar 2010 8:02 am
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| Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous)
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Great chapter, really liked the conversation between sev and harry. Harry's right, ron would freak if he thought snape would smack him. Love the story, even Luna. Please post soon!
| Title: Chapter 3: Visiting the Dursleys
| 21 Mar 2010 3:07 pm
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| Reviewer: S.S (Anonymous)
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Brilliant chapter ca't wait for more. Poor Sev, Dumbledore wants to spank him. Hope everything works out with Harry and Sev
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